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July 6, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Ahhh!!! The suspense is so high in this chapter, I can't relax! What happened to Jerrick? Are Zeke and Cerelia fighting to the death? So many questions! =P (And I know how addicting GBA Pokemon can be; I once actually commandeered my little sister's copy of Silver and played for a week!) Anyway, another great chapter! I can only guess what'll come next, but I'm sure it'll be good!
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July 2, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Poor Shuey, she was definitely in the wrong line when they were handing out parents! (at least she was in the right one when they were handing out mates! :)
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June 24, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Interesting, interesting...from the looks of it both of her parents are a bit uh, gee, what's a nice way to say 'whacked in the head'? :)
If you can't find your Windows disk, Open Office (OpenOffice.org) is a good substitute (and it's free!). It isn't exactly the same, but it's way better than Word Pad :)
If you can't find your Windows disk, Open Office (OpenOffice.org) is a good substitute (and it's free!). It isn't exactly the same, but it's way better than Word Pad :)
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June 24, 2008 at 12:00 AM
I was wondering if you'd bring Shuey's mother into the story at some point, and now you have! Yay! Intrigue and violence abound next chapter I hope? :P
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June 24, 2008 at 12:00 AM
WHEW! Been awhile since I reviewed this story... I'm gonna need a few minutes to mentally prepare myself and enter 'Review Mode'.
Preperation....12%
Inner Snidne: While my outer self is preparing to review your work, It's now time for my promotions! First off, we apologize to all buyers of our Life-Sized Jerrik V1.0 models. After hundreds of complaints about burned down homes, thousands of dollars of property damages, a week long discussion with my legal team, and the destruction of one of our testing organizations, we have decided to halt production on Jerrik models for the time being. We encourage all buyers of the Life-Sized Shuey model to return any Jerrik models they have and they shall recieve either a full refund or a free Jerrik V1.5 model when it comes out. Please note we are not responsible for possible therapy sessions you may need.
Preperation....36%
Inner Snidne: In further compensations for property damages and to get you to stop suing us, we here at Angelic Evil Inc. would like to offer a promotional offer. A free Shuey-upgrade. Simply send in your Life-Sized Shuey model to us where we will present the upgrade which will offer an all new low, a 40% death rate as well as a 'mood adjustment' which should come in handy when we release our Life-Sized Jerrik V1.5 Models.
Preperation....77%
Inner Snidne: And now, we would like to introduce now available, so you can still have fun while you wait, Life-Sized Leon models. This time, we CAN guarantee your safety with only a 5% death rate increase in all newer Shuey models. Now you too can enjoy Dare-stabby moments with your favorite (Or not so favorite) cherry-head angel. Or, like the perverts we KNOW you are, you can readjust scenes of this well-liked story and create your own all new experience of what might have been if Shuey liked Leon.
Please note there is a 90% chance of a death rate increase of 30% if you attempt this. It's your own skin.
Preperation...100%! Entering 'Review Mode'...
Inner Snidne: And now, here to review is outer me.
Chapter 27... what can I say? Really, it quite the tender moment of closeness between Jerrik and Shuey. Though it was quite bold of her to offer what she did. Then again, nothing says trusting like offering to swallow a man's seed... Although I had to admit that when I envisioned the look on Shuey's face as Jerrik made a mess of it, it was SO FUCKING SEXY. But anyway...
Chapter 28 means it's back to business and Shuey is once again a target because of her unique heritage. Renegade angels is a bad thing, and am willing to bet that once she can, Shuey is definately going for some Dare revenge for capturing her. And now the question remains is who is going to help her. Jerrik is an obvious choice considering they are now 'lovers' and Leon is definately going to lend his support. Will her father take them on too? Perhaps, because since Shuey is his daughter it would ruin his own image in the demon standing. The Great Demon General's name tarnished by the weakness of his own flesh and blood... yeah I could see him rationalize it in a selfish nature to help her out.
Of course, personally I don't think he is going to help her. Perhaps he might consider this for her as a 'test' to prove that she is worthy of inheriting his golden eyes. It's action time!
This is outer me...
Inner Snidne: And this is inner me...
Both: And this was our review!
Snidne, out!
Preperation....12%
Inner Snidne: While my outer self is preparing to review your work, It's now time for my promotions! First off, we apologize to all buyers of our Life-Sized Jerrik V1.0 models. After hundreds of complaints about burned down homes, thousands of dollars of property damages, a week long discussion with my legal team, and the destruction of one of our testing organizations, we have decided to halt production on Jerrik models for the time being. We encourage all buyers of the Life-Sized Shuey model to return any Jerrik models they have and they shall recieve either a full refund or a free Jerrik V1.5 model when it comes out. Please note we are not responsible for possible therapy sessions you may need.
Preperation....36%
Inner Snidne: In further compensations for property damages and to get you to stop suing us, we here at Angelic Evil Inc. would like to offer a promotional offer. A free Shuey-upgrade. Simply send in your Life-Sized Shuey model to us where we will present the upgrade which will offer an all new low, a 40% death rate as well as a 'mood adjustment' which should come in handy when we release our Life-Sized Jerrik V1.5 Models.
Preperation....77%
Inner Snidne: And now, we would like to introduce now available, so you can still have fun while you wait, Life-Sized Leon models. This time, we CAN guarantee your safety with only a 5% death rate increase in all newer Shuey models. Now you too can enjoy Dare-stabby moments with your favorite (Or not so favorite) cherry-head angel. Or, like the perverts we KNOW you are, you can readjust scenes of this well-liked story and create your own all new experience of what might have been if Shuey liked Leon.
Please note there is a 90% chance of a death rate increase of 30% if you attempt this. It's your own skin.
Preperation...100%! Entering 'Review Mode'...
Inner Snidne: And now, here to review is outer me.
Chapter 27... what can I say? Really, it quite the tender moment of closeness between Jerrik and Shuey. Though it was quite bold of her to offer what she did. Then again, nothing says trusting like offering to swallow a man's seed... Although I had to admit that when I envisioned the look on Shuey's face as Jerrik made a mess of it, it was SO FUCKING SEXY. But anyway...
Chapter 28 means it's back to business and Shuey is once again a target because of her unique heritage. Renegade angels is a bad thing, and am willing to bet that once she can, Shuey is definately going for some Dare revenge for capturing her. And now the question remains is who is going to help her. Jerrik is an obvious choice considering they are now 'lovers' and Leon is definately going to lend his support. Will her father take them on too? Perhaps, because since Shuey is his daughter it would ruin his own image in the demon standing. The Great Demon General's name tarnished by the weakness of his own flesh and blood... yeah I could see him rationalize it in a selfish nature to help her out.
Of course, personally I don't think he is going to help her. Perhaps he might consider this for her as a 'test' to prove that she is worthy of inheriting his golden eyes. It's action time!
This is outer me...
Inner Snidne: And this is inner me...
Both: And this was our review!
Snidne, out!
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June 14, 2008 at 12:00 AM
I've just entertained some thoughts of killing your housemate named Davis...*evil laugh*...but, as you may be fond of him, I'll desist. :P So, because of this delay, does that mean you'll treat us to two chapters when you get it fixed? lol :)
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June 14, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Oops, sorry, I meant "David". :P
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June 12, 2008 at 12:00 AM
No worries about the delay, just as long as we get a new chapter eventually (can't go too long without my weekly dose ;)
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June 5, 2008 at 12:00 AM
this story is good it has alot of potentianl and has made good progress so far and i cant wait for the next one :)
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June 5, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Poor Jerrick, I think he's going to have to sit Shuey down and explain that it kinda kills the mood when she keeps running off :)
(meanwhile, since it was her first go at it, he's very, very lucky she didn't use her teeth ;)
(meanwhile, since it was her first go at it, he's very, very lucky she didn't use her teeth ;)