schedule
September 6, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Definitely liked seeing how Shuey came to be as it were (though now I sorta feel sorry for Brethmel). Thanks for a great story, and letting the rest of us in for the ride! :)
Meanwhile, completely off topic, the other day I was driving to work and a car with the numberplate "Shuey" went past me. Made me laugh :)
Meanwhile, completely off topic, the other day I was driving to work and a car with the numberplate "Shuey" went past me. Made me laugh :)
schedule
August 22, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Awesomeness. I was glad that I stayed here for the long haul to read this story. Not mention I made a bundle from those models. Sure, we had to sacrifice about half the human race, but hey, that's business. Besides, only the idoits who bought them died (Didn't read the warning labels... tsk) so really, is it that much of a loss? Meh, not really.
Um, yeah, so I got sidetracked there. Anyway, very nice ending, Shuey's fight definely had alot more of an edge to it then last time, and the gun was a surprisingly nice touch. And of course, nothing beats a fight to kill your father then a cuddling with your mate afterwords to bask in the post-kill afterglow. If such a glow exists. I'm still researching.
All in all, a great story. It broke the generalization of Angels and Demons (Except for Zeke, but let's face it, there has to be at least ONE badass demon) as well as explored a different side to what a breed of their mixed blood would experience. Shuey was in all aspects the 'grey area' kind of character; Neither good or evil, simply self-preserving by whatever means she could. And in that, she symbolizes alot of other aspects about life that we define as 'good' or 'evil' to be really only a means of survival. (Shuey's violent outbursts at the beginning of the story, especially concerning her being touched, are signs of what others might see as a 'mental problem') Her romance with Jerrik was only icing on the cake... hmm... cake...
Snidne's Grade: A
You also get a free Final Version of the Life-Sized Shuey Model, with a 10% Death Rate. Good job.
Snidne, out!
Um, yeah, so I got sidetracked there. Anyway, very nice ending, Shuey's fight definely had alot more of an edge to it then last time, and the gun was a surprisingly nice touch. And of course, nothing beats a fight to kill your father then a cuddling with your mate afterwords to bask in the post-kill afterglow. If such a glow exists. I'm still researching.
All in all, a great story. It broke the generalization of Angels and Demons (Except for Zeke, but let's face it, there has to be at least ONE badass demon) as well as explored a different side to what a breed of their mixed blood would experience. Shuey was in all aspects the 'grey area' kind of character; Neither good or evil, simply self-preserving by whatever means she could. And in that, she symbolizes alot of other aspects about life that we define as 'good' or 'evil' to be really only a means of survival. (Shuey's violent outbursts at the beginning of the story, especially concerning her being touched, are signs of what others might see as a 'mental problem') Her romance with Jerrik was only icing on the cake... hmm... cake...
Snidne's Grade: A
You also get a free Final Version of the Life-Sized Shuey Model, with a 10% Death Rate. Good job.
Snidne, out!
schedule
August 20, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Two things I am not to sure about, one is why did shuey's father wnat to kill her? and two is why were shuey's parents ever together in the first place? Did you explain this and I am just blanking or what?
schedule
August 11, 2008 at 12:00 AM
A glasses fetish... *Falls to his knees* DAMN YOU! DAMN YOU GOD AND YOUR SICK SENSE OF HUMOR!!!!
And the only reason I say that is because I wear glasses. I swear it seems the more I talk to you, the more it seems we have all these things that compliment each other. And it gets me so frustrated I can't see you, although that would most likely mean I would be doing... um... 'things' with you. Like pitching story ideas! Yeah, that works...
Ah yes, story review time... yes...
Shuey the dominant... should I be concerned I got an erection from reading that? And not your average 'guy reaction' erection... more like a 'It's about to rip through the fabric of my jeans' erection. Damn, that was so hot. Getting all possessive and growling and forceful... ok, I better stop here before I get too aroused to think... which tends to happen when I write erotic scenes. Does that happen to you? Wait don't answer that... ok answer that... but keep it vague... or not... or...GAH!
Inner Snidne: *Bops his outer self* BAD SNIDNE! Get your mind out of the gutter and finish your review!
Fine, fine! Geez... Anyway, liked the battle scene with Shuey and her dad. It seemed short and slightly less actiony then I thought it would be, but it's good to see Shuey one-up her father for once. Take THAT evil dude! Hopefully this means that Shuey can have some peace and quiet in her life... which means more time for loud, wild sex with Jerrik! God I'm so perverted... Plus more possessive Shuey. I wonder what Jerrik's expression would be like if he saw someone flirting with Shuey... or did I miss that scene?
Inner Snidne: Hey don't look at me. We were distracted by naughty thoughts.
Riiiiight.
Anyway, I'm glad you like the name I chose for the company. I was thinking of what to call it and suddenly 'Angelic Evil Inc.' popped into my head and I went, 'I'll work with it'. So yes you may use the name, it's only fair since I'm using your characters for my models. Speaking of which behold my Clara and Deamon models that I semi-hinted at revealing last review!
Combined with our 3 most populr models in their latest versions, included with the fact they these new model do not increase the death rate, you are in the clear! Purchase 5 now! Right now! No, not after you visit your mother-in-law! In fact, steal from her purse to pay for these models as payback for wasting your time that you could have spent coming to buy these models!
One last thing... I've been thinking of developing a Zeke and Cerelia models for further action and fun... unfortunately, testing shows it causes Shuey models to raise up to 95% Death rate... HOWEVER! If I get enough people who want me to make them anyway (Mention it in your reviews people!) I will at the very least, try to reduce to death rate to 80%.
Now get out there and reveiw people!
Snidne, out!
And the only reason I say that is because I wear glasses. I swear it seems the more I talk to you, the more it seems we have all these things that compliment each other. And it gets me so frustrated I can't see you, although that would most likely mean I would be doing... um... 'things' with you. Like pitching story ideas! Yeah, that works...
Ah yes, story review time... yes...
Shuey the dominant... should I be concerned I got an erection from reading that? And not your average 'guy reaction' erection... more like a 'It's about to rip through the fabric of my jeans' erection. Damn, that was so hot. Getting all possessive and growling and forceful... ok, I better stop here before I get too aroused to think... which tends to happen when I write erotic scenes. Does that happen to you? Wait don't answer that... ok answer that... but keep it vague... or not... or...GAH!
Inner Snidne: *Bops his outer self* BAD SNIDNE! Get your mind out of the gutter and finish your review!
Fine, fine! Geez... Anyway, liked the battle scene with Shuey and her dad. It seemed short and slightly less actiony then I thought it would be, but it's good to see Shuey one-up her father for once. Take THAT evil dude! Hopefully this means that Shuey can have some peace and quiet in her life... which means more time for loud, wild sex with Jerrik! God I'm so perverted... Plus more possessive Shuey. I wonder what Jerrik's expression would be like if he saw someone flirting with Shuey... or did I miss that scene?
Inner Snidne: Hey don't look at me. We were distracted by naughty thoughts.
Riiiiight.
Anyway, I'm glad you like the name I chose for the company. I was thinking of what to call it and suddenly 'Angelic Evil Inc.' popped into my head and I went, 'I'll work with it'. So yes you may use the name, it's only fair since I'm using your characters for my models. Speaking of which behold my Clara and Deamon models that I semi-hinted at revealing last review!
Combined with our 3 most populr models in their latest versions, included with the fact they these new model do not increase the death rate, you are in the clear! Purchase 5 now! Right now! No, not after you visit your mother-in-law! In fact, steal from her purse to pay for these models as payback for wasting your time that you could have spent coming to buy these models!
One last thing... I've been thinking of developing a Zeke and Cerelia models for further action and fun... unfortunately, testing shows it causes Shuey models to raise up to 95% Death rate... HOWEVER! If I get enough people who want me to make them anyway (Mention it in your reviews people!) I will at the very least, try to reduce to death rate to 80%.
Now get out there and reveiw people!
Snidne, out!
schedule
August 4, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Another beautiful chapter. I can't wait to see where this all goes. Take your time and don't burn yourself out. A lot of the stories that are fantastic never are finished due to the fact that the author burns out. Keep writing, your fantastic. (talk about broken, short sentences geeze! No wonder I read and let the writers that can actually compile a sentence write! lol)
schedule
August 2, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Whew, glass of ice over here please! :D Though this chapter does lead to the question, 'can angels live without both of their wings?'. (oh, and also 'is there anyone out there for Leon? (hint hint ;) )
schedule
July 29, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Review time now? Yes?
I'm glad you adore me... I'm adorable, I know. I'm also not very modest. Compliment me more please. Heh.
And just to let you know, the whole 'President' thing is just for the public... you know, those people who aren't in the 'trusted circle' and all that... I've spoken too much as it is...
But wow! What chapters! Last my review left off, Shuey has gone back to the scene of the crime to find Daddy and Mommy all gone... but it looks like they left a 'gift' for Shuey... even mre powers she can't control. Is it truly as bad as Leon made it to be? Or can it be a blessing in disguise? So exciting!
In comparasion though, the Chapter 32 wasn't as exciting, though it did shed some light on a few things and added another mystery to the story... just what CAN Leon do anyway? I mean, besides annoy Jerrik and Shuey by creating uncomfortable moments while being in the same room as them. I have a theory, and in case I'm right I won't say to ruin things... but here's a hint: Shuey will never see Leon's powers. Why? Heh, well, that's why they call it a hint! Just an exciting mystery... stand aside cartoony kids and your meddling dog, this is Sninde's territory now!
And of course, Shuey being stubborn is a common thing by now, but it's refreshing to see it after many chapters of 'helpless Shuey' and 'confused Shuey'. Now if only we can get a decent 'pissed-off Dare stabbing Shuey' scene, we're back to basics.
Ahem... now, we here at 'Angelic Evil Inc.' would like to announce that we are preparing the finalized versions of the Life Sized Shuey, Jerrik, and Leon models. We are also preparing to unveil a few side characters that are not as important but nonetheless play some role in the story... which are they? Well that's a secret!
Our models have reached an all-time low... a 25% death rate for all models. You now have an even greater chance for survival! So go and buy your new models when they are unveiled, coming to a shady business retail near you!
Snidne, out!
I'm glad you adore me... I'm adorable, I know. I'm also not very modest. Compliment me more please. Heh.
And just to let you know, the whole 'President' thing is just for the public... you know, those people who aren't in the 'trusted circle' and all that... I've spoken too much as it is...
But wow! What chapters! Last my review left off, Shuey has gone back to the scene of the crime to find Daddy and Mommy all gone... but it looks like they left a 'gift' for Shuey... even mre powers she can't control. Is it truly as bad as Leon made it to be? Or can it be a blessing in disguise? So exciting!
In comparasion though, the Chapter 32 wasn't as exciting, though it did shed some light on a few things and added another mystery to the story... just what CAN Leon do anyway? I mean, besides annoy Jerrik and Shuey by creating uncomfortable moments while being in the same room as them. I have a theory, and in case I'm right I won't say to ruin things... but here's a hint: Shuey will never see Leon's powers. Why? Heh, well, that's why they call it a hint! Just an exciting mystery... stand aside cartoony kids and your meddling dog, this is Sninde's territory now!
And of course, Shuey being stubborn is a common thing by now, but it's refreshing to see it after many chapters of 'helpless Shuey' and 'confused Shuey'. Now if only we can get a decent 'pissed-off Dare stabbing Shuey' scene, we're back to basics.
Ahem... now, we here at 'Angelic Evil Inc.' would like to announce that we are preparing the finalized versions of the Life Sized Shuey, Jerrik, and Leon models. We are also preparing to unveil a few side characters that are not as important but nonetheless play some role in the story... which are they? Well that's a secret!
Our models have reached an all-time low... a 25% death rate for all models. You now have an even greater chance for survival! So go and buy your new models when they are unveiled, coming to a shady business retail near you!
Snidne, out!
schedule
July 28, 2008 at 12:00 AM
If you reply to my reviews you can just say Heather and i'm sure i'll know who your talking to.
Yet another great chapter. Can't wait for the next. I think this should be made into a movie. Thats how much I love it. Or even a Tv show, and I dont really watch Tv but I would totally watch this if it was made into one. Keep up the good work.
Yet another great chapter. Can't wait for the next. I think this should be made into a movie. Thats how much I love it. Or even a Tv show, and I dont really watch Tv but I would totally watch this if it was made into one. Keep up the good work.
schedule
July 26, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Poor Shuey, over the course of the story I'd forgotten how young she really is. Love the imagery of the fountain=her brain processes though, brilliant illustration :)
schedule
July 26, 2008 at 12:00 AM
AHHHHHH!!! I've missed so much of this story!!! And now that I'm back, I definitely want more! :P As always, you have me on the edge of my seat! Update soon!