AFF Fiction Portal

rate_review Reviews

for Trial by Tina Aviary

by Pakkster

person LeeEnfield
schedule February 23, 2008 at 12:00 AM
A Minotaur? Hell yeah I'm enjoying! You are -quite- welcome!
person Pakkster
schedule February 16, 2008 at 12:00 AM
*nods* I agree, Dragoon said the EXACT same thing. lol. So, I'll edit this as soon as I can thank you for the words. ^_^
person LeeEnfield
schedule February 15, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Hiya, I'm a huge fan of this story so far. Huge. But your last chapter here gets confusing. Towards the end, you start focusing on Jennifer in captivity for one or two sentences, then go to Tina and Cerebrus for one or two sentences, then go back to Jennifer. It gets really hard to follow. I know you're roleplaying this, but editing the Jennifer scene and the Tina scene into their own separate chunks would make reading much easier. Still, your story pretty awesome! Fearsome fantasy creatures forcing themselves onto human women? Hot!!Definitely looking forward to the next chapter!
person Nunya
schedule February 11, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Needs more spooge
person Nunya
schedule February 11, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Still needs more spooge
person Anon
schedule February 11, 2008 at 12:00 AM
I think you need a bukkake scene at least once.