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I just wanted to leave a review and say that I'm in love with this story so far, as well as "Nymphaea"; it's wonderful how everything has such a real quality to it, despite the more supernatural elements, with imperfect relationships and struggles to fix everything that don't always turn out right.

I look forward to however far it continues!

this is my favorite story in adult fanfiction. net. It´s really lovely and getting better... Please do not give up. Wish you luck and inspiration. Mneme

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Berlin: though your phrasing is a little harsh (*twinkle*), I can understand your point of view. Personally, I don't paint this in black and white. Your accusations are not completely false, but Ayve really is an adult and even though he is naive and inexperienced in the field of intimate relationships, he would say no if he was not attracted to Pheus. He does enjoy Pheus' attention and will come to have a more active role in their relationship. That does not mean, however, that their relationship is perfectly healthy; you're right there. Still, I feel you are regarding things a little too much in black and white. In a way, Pheus is exactly like Ayve. In fact, he is even more behind in his development than Ayve is. Okay, he knows that sex is fun and seeks it therefore. So what? It's not exactly mature. Pheus still depends extremely on his father's appreciation. Of course, whatever leads him to act the way he does, you will always be able to say ‘that doesn’t make the behaviour itself better’. I cannot pretend that it is not partly the cause for Ayve’s confusion in Nymphaea. However, I don’t think Pheus’ actions really harm Ayve. They confuse him, but they are not the major cause for Ayve’s inner troubles, later on. It just takes Ayve a while (*cough* - a few thousand years *twinkle*) to determine the nature of his feelings for Pheus – if they are genuine or merely invoked by the circumstances under which he hooked up with him.

Thank you for sticking by despite your antipathy! :)

mneme: Thank you for the support. Usually, I draw my motivation mainly from the comments on aarinfantasy, but lately they are lacking. I know this is partly due to a lack in time of my most faithful readers, yet it still upsets me a little. Don’t worry, it will not keep me from continuing the story, but it might slow my updating down…
Inspiration is definitely not the problem ;). I know what will happen, I merely have to word it.

Thank you, :lindsey: for your compliments. I'm always happy to hear that my style/my general use of the English language is good - not being a native speaker of it. I actually had my doubts in this chapter; there were too many sentences built in the same way. It's good to hear that the corrections I made seem to have improved the style sufficiently.

I agree with you - I prefer the more complex stories as well. The best sex scenes are those that are not merely about the satisfaction of physical needs in most cases - and there is a lot more between Pheus and Ayve. At some point there will actually be too much between them, but you'll see ;). The story definitely will go on for quite a while (I hope I manage to find the time to update regularly, real life will cost me more time than usual in the next months).

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Nope, sorry, Pheus isn't off my shit list. In fact, he might be higher on it now (or lower, I guess, depends on how I order my shit list -- lowest to highest or highest to lowest, but the point of the matter is that he DOES NOT make me a happy girl!). Really, I'm trying to be open-minded here, but I'm not seeing any way around it. He's totally taking advantage of Ayve. Of his inexperience. It's like a child molester telling a little kid that it's ok and perfectly normal for them to be doing... that, yanno? Pretty heinous comparison but that's the first thing that popped in my head as I was reading this chapter.

Maybe if I could hear from Ayve's perspective I'd feel better. If he was actually aware and enjoying it, it wouldn't seem to creepy and vile to me. Then again, I'd probably be tempted to believe that it was a case of Stockholm Syndrome if Ayve actually viewed the situation positively.

But I shall keep reading & keep trying to find SOME way to appreciate and accept Pheus. :) Good chapter!

Sorry I never reviewed before, even though I am a loyal reader of "Abyss". Abyss is a very entertaining story. It caught my interest by the first couple of paragraphs. The spelling and grammer used were superb; no mistakes noted. The writing style and vocabulary made reading more enjoyable and heightened my interest. I loved the detailed used in Abyss. It allowed the reader to picture what they are reading. In other words, I love it! Abyss is only one of a couple of other stories that I look forward to for updates. The fact that Abyss doesn't begin with sex or the main characters immediately falling in love was an added bonus. I like a story with a plot. I rather the story gradually work its way to the climax. I'll be looking for some future updates.
.:Lindsey:. [[loyal reader]]

A sequel! Woohoo!

Beautifully written as usual. I love your way with words. Good to hear that Ayve is getting better, and I approve of the new white hair. Also hope that with Pheus making himself the new leader that Ayve's political obligations will be lessened. The poor man needs a break finally. Cannot wait to hear what Stephen has been up to in the nine months that have passed.

When you said that you're starting from the beginning for the new readers, did you mean just describing Ayve's roots and his relationship with Pheus in greater detail? Or are you planning on going over everything with Stephen as well?

Keep up the great, work!

LOL No, I will not rewrite Nymphaea. I meant that I wanted to go into more detail with Ayve's early years and the genesis of the relationship with Pheus and decided to show those details in context instead having short flash backs that a new reader would not understand. I sort of wanted to start anew and instead of letting you see Ayve from Stephen's point of view I wanted to show Pheus' perception of Ayve (which tells you a lot about Pheus as well).

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Hi I´m reading this ;)

Nice start waiting for more!

Hello Berlin and Aleks :). Thank you for commenting; it really matters to me (show me the writer who publishes his/her work and does not want feedback)!