rate_review Reviews

It`s good but it seems a bit unfinished!

I thought this was really going good for a while, even though I'm not particularly fond of one-sided pleasure during sex (actually I was kind of hoping to be surprised, by what I don't know, I just was hoping to be surprised) but then it seemed like it cut off right in the middle of the story. I was left with a "What the hell?" kinda aftertaste in my mouth, which is too bad because it seems like there could be a lot done with the Octopus King and Xeno (cool name btw) but the lackluster end was really so "meh" that the story is kinda forgettable. I say this because I want to convey an honest critique and improve your writing, not to rag or just insult or anything.

Beautifully written. Are you going to continue this, or will it just be a one-shot? Wonderful either way. You have a gift for words, and I look forward to more from you.

You do write non-con SO well.

And the tentacles were very close to Juxian Tang...

Only objection - the story needs to be continued!