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October 18, 2014 at 12:00 AM
Amazing read. I'm still stuck on who has the fish as a pet. Whew! You are a great writer!
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November 10, 2012 at 12:00 AM
That was such satisfying read...I have not enjoyed a story so much in a while, please do keep on writing such intelligent and heart-warming stories and you will have a life-long fan!
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November 7, 2012 at 12:00 AM
An exciting, intriguing story with heart-warming love not only between two lovable characters but between family and team-mates. Overall a very enjoyable read, hope you will write more awesome, smart stories like this.
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November 6, 2012 at 12:00 AM
This is such a "clever" and well-written story. So good it could easily be made into a movie and I'd go see it.
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January 8, 2009 at 12:00 AM
I was a little disappointed with this story, mostly in how the "puzzles" were used, and also mainly how unbelievable the last several chapters were. Many things went through my mind, such as: How did the Game Master plan out all these puzzles? How did he have the time to prepare such a complex, detailed 'game board'? Did he build everything himself? If he did, how did he gain the skills for carpentry, electronics, etc.? How does he have the money to hire mercenaries, etc.? This sort of thing (the game) would cost a lot to design and implement, and the more people you bring into it, the harder it is to hide your identity.
Also, I think you should probably note somewhere in your story where all the puzzles came from (whether you created it yourself, or found it in a book/online).
Other than that, the relationship build-up between the two main characters was relatively good, and the idea for the story (and many elements within the story) were very creative, although it dragged on a little too long for my tastes. It seemed as if you got carried away trying to add as many puzzles to the story as you could, and lost track of where you were going a little.
This isn't meant to be a flame, so please don't take it as one! Whether your story was perfect or not, I am always in awe of someone who obviously puts so much time and effort into completing a multi-chaptered fic. Thanks for writing, and I look forward to future stories from you!
Also, I think you should probably note somewhere in your story where all the puzzles came from (whether you created it yourself, or found it in a book/online).
Other than that, the relationship build-up between the two main characters was relatively good, and the idea for the story (and many elements within the story) were very creative, although it dragged on a little too long for my tastes. It seemed as if you got carried away trying to add as many puzzles to the story as you could, and lost track of where you were going a little.
This isn't meant to be a flame, so please don't take it as one! Whether your story was perfect or not, I am always in awe of someone who obviously puts so much time and effort into completing a multi-chaptered fic. Thanks for writing, and I look forward to future stories from you!
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November 3, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Whew, that was a quick (and humongous!) update. x3 Very well-done on the story; so nice to see an ambitious novel-y project like this one wrap up so nicely. And such a happy ending! ^__^ I'm glad everything worked out so well for everyone... though I would have liked SOME closure on the Game Master, to have some insight into him or something. I s'pose it's more realistic the way it is, though. (And I'm assuming things worked out well for Alicia and Dylan. =3)
The puzzles were fun to work through, too. xD Interactive story~!
Lovely job, thanks for sharing it with us. =3
The puzzles were fun to work through, too. xD Interactive story~!
Lovely job, thanks for sharing it with us. =3
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November 3, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Love the ending. Hoping to see more stuff from you soon.
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November 2, 2008 at 12:00 AM
I am saddened that this only has three reviews. D= It's a lovely story; nifty plotline and really, really likable characters. I really got into it and I hope you update soon! ^__^
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November 2, 2008 at 12:00 AM
This was a very interesting piece. I just found it and read it all the way through. It captivated me and held my attention from beginning to end. A great mystery and intriguing story. Thanks for sharing it and I look forward to reading your other works. A great story in deed!
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October 28, 2008 at 12:00 AM
I'm totally enamoured with this and can't wait for more.