rate_review Reviews

Heya! I'm enjoying your story (well, so much as one can 'enjoy' a story about this subject!) You said you don't mind constructive criticism, so I just wanted to point out one thing that was bothering me a bit as a read. You tend to let your sentences run on a bit; in some places it might be best to cut them up a little, even if the spellcheck wants to call them fragments. It just sounds less cumbersome that way :) It's not a huge deal, and I'm not sure if anyone else would even notice, but it happens to be one of my pet peeves so it stuck out to me! Either way, I hope to read more - and I'm glad they have themselves a bodyguard now! Sounds like they'll need it!

and that is the hard part facing a court room

you have taken somethng that is a very hard pill to swallow and made it something that just about anyone can conect with i do hope you have other chapters for this tale as i would like to see them take that trip

I like Andrew. I'm looking forward to what you have planned for them.

This is a very nice start, a very nice cliff hanger. It leaves us asking for more:-)

Cheers,

Isa

Ohhh! Nice story!!! PLZ PLZ PLZ update again soon!!! >_<
I really can't wait to know what will happen to poor little Tom and all the other children!!
I hope they'll catch the assholes fast and get them all to jail! grrr
And I so want Tom to get better! *huggles him* ^^ He's been through enough!

Anyways, thanks alot for the story! It really was an awesome first! *hugs*

A nice start. Please continue.