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Awwww, poor Far Seer :( He's so lonely... COME BACK KEE KEE!!!! XD lol Pleeeeease update soon, mate! I wants to read morrrrre! lol

I am loving this story more and more. Poor Terry, out of his tragic run in he came across a new friend. I like how he tried to talk to Far Seer which is more than we can say for the rest of the people in his weird little world.

I do hope there is more soon!

Because I know you are more likely to check a review before submitting another chapter: http://dinkelion.deviantart.com/art/Far-Seer-75082356 Fan art for you and your lovely story. I hope you enjoy :)

Hi lambent, wow - your writing, combined with such an unusual subject caught my interest in a big way. As an AU, it still captured the essense of a time period, and also the 'alternateness'- that there are dangers unknown to us in the waters, spooky sounding fish that get mad and merfolk...well done with that. I liked the thought of them having legends, maybe you can even make one up and include it somewhere down the line? Your writing is so balanced, I don't know how else to describe it. Just enough of everything. Descriptions, conversation, thoughts from the characters...

Far Seer, what a protagonist. Brave, strong, just different enough in his manner and his thinking to not seem human, but alien, and you did that so well. He has no qualms about killing, in fact, he's vicious but doesn't see himself that way, and as a guess that is just how that species is in this story. Not just that, but on land he's helpless and he's weaponless, making him a sympathetic character despite his strength. Like a killer whale or something. And the gate crashing made me wince, and definitely drove home the idea of hatred of captivity.

I have absolutely nothing critical to say!! Thanks for writing this, On to chapter two...

ch two- isn't it true, though, how characters sometimes write themselves! Nice drawing, btw, those eyes.

The human with the merman... it was so real, done so well, fascinating! Getting a glimpse of another side of Far Seer. How much he really understood, and after showing off the differences, how alike he is on an emotional level was almost heartbreaking. Making his captivity even more wrong. Him waiting for Terry, his only friend, to return, night after night, very touching. I found myself trying to will him to come back. So, does he, and what happens with the guards, and how is the dead one explained? What will the duke think of his prize possession actually liking Terry, if he does return?

For me, its a great story if it makes me think of all that COULD happen, and I hope you write more to this soon! It's so unique and your skills at telling the tale first rate.

Here's the only thoughts I had other than what comes next and how soon you might update. Terry...Make him not go so willingly to his death when he falls in the water, maybe struggle more to swim even with his hands tied? And the n/c explained further, why would the guards feel free to do something like that, since in the first chapter it seemed as if the castle was well run and guards kept to their place. To rape a doctors assistant, even drunk, maybe they would think some of regretting it? Or of two of them not wanting to appear to be wimps with the one who instigated it? Know what I mean? If you don't agree, just ignore this... but its all the conscrit I came up with!

Thanks again, for sharing this. Please... keep writing...I'm hooked

This is awesome, i can't wait to see where it goes.

I don't know enough about Terry as it is, but I'm hoping he isn't too frail, so to speak. Establishing that he is young, a little on the nervous and awkward side is reminding me of a countless number of other uke original characters. Then again, I'm not complaining- I loved Terry's cognition between him and Far Seer and how leveled he was with the situation. I do hope Terry doesn't get himself in any more bad situations. But that's just me. -smiles- I only anticipate a future chapter soon. =D You wouldn't mind describing perhaps any facial or fish-like detail to do with Far Seer's tail, ears, eyes and skin, will you? I would love to draw him.

This is a wonderful intro!! I love the pace you have this at, where nothing is too long and drawn out (and it is so tempting to do so, as other people do) and it's imaginative and quick! I love it! And I am reallying enjoying the non-historical based version of mer-folk, but a much more realistic take. And your character, Far Seer- He is just awesome in so many ways as a character... Personally I wouldn't like to be killed, but you've developed him in such an understandable way. I really love this language barrier between him and humans. Wonderful perspective! I wish I could say more about it- more about how cool your character is and how captivating this story is, but I can't because really, I would be just a broken record. I can only hope you'll submit chapters in the future steadily!

Just stumbled upon this fanfic, and I have to say, it was breathtakingly beautiful. Though I'm usually skeptical about mer-fics, this story instantly captivated me with its different perspective on merfolk. Many mer-fics I've encountered usually depict mermaids as a delicate creature with unearthly beauty, and that has grown old. Your merman, on the other hand, is grotesquely beautiful and dangerous. 'Tis one of the best combinations I've encountered for a merman. Please continue this wonderful story of yours, for this fan shall faithfully await your next update! *salutes and skips back to lurkdom*

I've been waiting to read a good story with Mermen for years, and finally you have done it. Bravo! This is wonderfully. I hung on every word that was written. Pretty please, right some more of this.