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March 15, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Chapter 2
Oh how sad. The merman thinks Terry has abandoned him. I wonder now why Terry didn't come back, although....what excuse could he give to see him? And he still has two guards after his balls, lol.
The only thing I did spot was....you gave Terry a gag halfway through his rape ordeal. One minute hes screaming and crying...the next he's under the table, panting through a gag. I think the ideal must have come to you suddenly, and you forgot to go back and amend the earlier part. It shouldn't be too hard to put right.....
Oh how sad. The merman thinks Terry has abandoned him. I wonder now why Terry didn't come back, although....what excuse could he give to see him? And he still has two guards after his balls, lol.
The only thing I did spot was....you gave Terry a gag halfway through his rape ordeal. One minute hes screaming and crying...the next he's under the table, panting through a gag. I think the ideal must have come to you suddenly, and you forgot to go back and amend the earlier part. It shouldn't be too hard to put right.....
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March 15, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Thanks for adding Terry's pov - I was wondering about it since you usually switch.
And just to throw it out there, since it has no basis at all and is just my thought at the moment - charles/terry?
Hahaha, could see it happening for some reason. But thats just a thought.
And just to throw it out there, since it has no basis at all and is just my thought at the moment - charles/terry?
Hahaha, could see it happening for some reason. But thats just a thought.
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February 20, 2008 at 12:00 AM
HI!!
I'm glad you continued it; it seems like Far Seer is much more soft that it seems in the begining. I like him very much. And Terry, I liked his reactions, because I think is not frecuently that a character presents fear of being touched in slash yaoi. I'm only hoping that you submit soon and keep writing in the same wonderfull way :)
I love mermaids!!! ^^
See ya!!!
I'm glad you continued it; it seems like Far Seer is much more soft that it seems in the begining. I like him very much. And Terry, I liked his reactions, because I think is not frecuently that a character presents fear of being touched in slash yaoi. I'm only hoping that you submit soon and keep writing in the same wonderfull way :)
I love mermaids!!! ^^
See ya!!!
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February 14, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Awww!!! That was so adorable, Kee-Kee and Kai!! ^-^ I enjoyed reading this chapter. I like seeing how the two of them get to know one another!! Poor Terry, being so shy and damaged. *pets him*
But Kai will defend him!!! 8DDD
Thanks, and great job, and I look forward to the next installment!!
But Kai will defend him!!! 8DDD
Thanks, and great job, and I look forward to the next installment!!
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February 13, 2008 at 12:00 AM
WOOT!!! Omg! That was freakin' awesome mate! I mean, there may not have been much violence and action as the other chapters, but this one seemed so much more... emotional, i think is the word? I feel bad for poor Terry, but I bet it wont take long for him to get use to Far Seer's touch ^_^ I just loved the curiosity both characters showed, and I now have the urge to touch Far Seer's fin too! That would be sooo cool!!! :P
Thankees for the update again mate! Update again SOON!!!! lol
Thankees for the update again mate! Update again SOON!!!! lol
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February 11, 2008 at 12:00 AM
nice, im lovin this story so much. Yaoiness and merman... What more could u ask for?Frankly i cant see anything major u need to work on in the writing of it, so i will now begin my begging for an update... PRETTY PLEASE KEEP UPDATING!!!!!
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February 10, 2008 at 12:00 AM
OOH! I LOVE THIS STORY! XD
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February 10, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Wow! I'm totally in love with this story. It is so well written and the characters are great! I love merfolk stories and this one is turning out to be perfect! I hope "Kee-Kee" (LOL--that's so cute!) gets reunited with Far Seer soon. I'm hoping for an update on this wonderful story!
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February 10, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Oh, this is one of the best mermaid stories I have ever read! please update is soon. ps and the fanart was really beautiful too
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February 10, 2008 at 12:00 AM
I just discovered this storie. I loved it!!I can't wait for the next chapter.... But I guess I have no choice in tne matter. Lol.
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