rate_review Reviews

First, you should probably correct some of the grammar in this first page. Besides should be beside, "get" should be buy, and how is it she barely scraped up enough money to buy the ticket? What did she have to do? I was surprised by her reaction to the cat speaking, since this is erotica and nowhere does it state this is a fantasy world, it can't be assumed by the name of the town. What sort of train is she riding? What kind of cat is sitting across from her that she's noticed how erect he's becoming from across an aisle? I don't think you have a bad idea for a story, but rework it and you can have a much better story in general.

you should continue this, its well written. And just the right amount of strange.

animal crossing ^_^!

Wow. This is one twisted fucked up story so far...I don't even know how to respond.