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December 20, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Grammar usage made some parts hard to understand. You said you wrote it late at night, but proofreading before posting is a good idea even if it's a quick run through. I still find mistakes with my stories, poems, etc. on the second and third times i proof read. So, just a suggestion to make it easy to read for the reader.
Overall, funny concept. Fresh parody idea. Keep writing!
Overall, funny concept. Fresh parody idea. Keep writing!