rate_review Reviews

I wish I could hear the rhythm, maybe something dark and pounding (no pun intended). It definitely reads as a song and not a poem, and I love the line: "Bind me, blind me, whip me, trick me," but my favorite stanza is "So pin my arms above my head, / tie my eyes with scarves of red, / bind me down upon my bed, / and have your way with me baby." I think, though, that you might considering omitting the "baby" at the end; it might leave the line hanging, creating a feel of anticipation, or (can't find the words), ok, like the listener is the one tied to the bed, waiting expectantly, then denied just a little something. Does that make any sense? Another option would be to replace "baby" with something a bit more intense. But it's great the way it is, anyway. I think you should put it to music, record it, and sell it to your fans, yes, definitely. I like the imagery it presents in such a few lines, and I just can't get the image of Weiss's Farfarello being taken while this plays in his head.

This would make a kick ass song! Though it would never see the radio... I'd totally write a melody for this, lol.