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January 21, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Great job as always. I feel so sorry for poor little T. still there and now all alone. It would be nice if you could bring him back into the story and if J. could really save him - like get him out of there, but I'm sure whatever you choose to do will be great.
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January 20, 2008 at 12:00 AM
What? No way!
When I first started reading this chapter, I thought for sure Jason's dad would be mad at Jonathan, not only for raping him, but for hurting him too...I thought you know, being family might count for something....How wrong could I be?
The ONLY thing that so obviously matters to Jason's father, is money. And now, he'd doing the ultimate betrayal to his son, sending him to a brothel to earn the rent money. What about the money Jonathan left behind? That's probably his beer money!
Really good chapter...
When I first started reading this chapter, I thought for sure Jason's dad would be mad at Jonathan, not only for raping him, but for hurting him too...I thought you know, being family might count for something....How wrong could I be?
The ONLY thing that so obviously matters to Jason's father, is money. And now, he'd doing the ultimate betrayal to his son, sending him to a brothel to earn the rent money. What about the money Jonathan left behind? That's probably his beer money!
Really good chapter...
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January 20, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Ohhhh this 'Keeper' sounds evil. And it appears he's teaching poor little Tristian how to entertain men properly.
I hope Jason doesn't have to stay at the Cave for long. But then, it's not going to be much better when he's gets home, he'll have to go back to fighting as soon as his arm has healed enough.
Pretty gritty chapter...very good!
I hope Jason doesn't have to stay at the Cave for long. But then, it's not going to be much better when he's gets home, he'll have to go back to fighting as soon as his arm has healed enough.
Pretty gritty chapter...very good!
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January 20, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Damn! I wonder when those kids are going to get a break??
And will u ever tell us why his 'dad' send him there for the first time? Or maybe it's not that important to know??
I hope his 'dad', Jonathan along with the Keeper and the other kid's oncle will pay for everything they did!
'cause the fights and just about everything is plain Evil!! They deserve the worst death of all! Plz give it to them!!!><
And will u ever tell us why his 'dad' send him there for the first time? Or maybe it's not that important to know??
I hope his 'dad', Jonathan along with the Keeper and the other kid's oncle will pay for everything they did!
'cause the fights and just about everything is plain Evil!! They deserve the worst death of all! Plz give it to them!!!><
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January 19, 2008 at 12:00 AM
CHAPTER 7
Oh wow...I can't believe that Jonathan left Jason like that, torn and bleeding. Although thinking about it, yeah...I guess I can believe it. Jonathan is a friend of his fathers, after all.
Mmmm, and what's Mr Annoying up to? He seems highly suspious to me. I just hope he's not looking for a bit of 'action' with poor Jason too...
Oh wow...I can't believe that Jonathan left Jason like that, torn and bleeding. Although thinking about it, yeah...I guess I can believe it. Jonathan is a friend of his fathers, after all.
Mmmm, and what's Mr Annoying up to? He seems highly suspious to me. I just hope he's not looking for a bit of 'action' with poor Jason too...
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January 19, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Awwwww, poor Jay :( And poor little Tristan! I need more I tell ya! MORRRRE!!!! XD lol The drama is so gutt-wrenching and the emotions are raw and clear. This update depressed me with all the sad and despairing emotions it brought XD it was that good! lol
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January 18, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Jesus, his dad is horrible! He should die a painful death! Poor kid, I hope someone will safe him soon.
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January 18, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Well this is my favourite story at AFF right now.
Your characters are very believeble. Jonathan abuses Jason but he also seems to care in some very twisted fuck-uped kind of way. To me it seems like he really believes he is in love with Jason or something like that. This streak in his personalety makes him seem like an even greater monster to me.
Does any of what I've written make sense? English isn't my first lenguage...
Your characters are very believeble. Jonathan abuses Jason but he also seems to care in some very twisted fuck-uped kind of way. To me it seems like he really believes he is in love with Jason or something like that. This streak in his personalety makes him seem like an even greater monster to me.
Does any of what I've written make sense? English isn't my first lenguage...
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January 18, 2008 at 12:00 AM
That was so sad, but so well writen! I hope J. will be able to save T. somehow - it would be depressing if they both suffer from what's happening, but neither can do anything for the other. I look forward to reading more.
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January 17, 2008 at 12:00 AM
MORE please!!! :P I wanna happen ending to this story, even though it sounds like a long time from then XD lol
A few minor gramar errors, but otherwise very emotional and grasping ^_^ Update SOON!!!!
A few minor gramar errors, but otherwise very emotional and grasping ^_^ Update SOON!!!!