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for Pain and.. pain?

by traxie

schedule February 8, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Very interesting. I can't wait to read what happens next. ^_^
person memorietrIL
schedule February 1, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Oh I hope there is more? It been very good so far sad but good.
schedule January 31, 2008 at 12:00 AM
:( Awwwwws, poor Tristan! Atleast he had Jason to help him through such a scarring point in his little life... Poor Jason too! I wanna murder his father, truely. AND that Jonathon dude! Grrrrr...*grabs voodoo dolls and starts stabbing them with needles up the ass* XD UPDATE SOON!!!
person itisme!
schedule January 29, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Wow... this story is sooo good.. please keep it up!!!
person Pierette
schedule January 26, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Poor Jason, poor Trista...
hope ther's gonna be a happy end to this story.
person janette
schedule January 25, 2008 at 12:00 AM
So far I love it. Hopefully good things will be for Jason down the pike.
person Kolgrim
schedule January 24, 2008 at 12:00 AM
You are a fast updater! Great :) Now if only I'd be as fast to keep up with your updates :P

Aws I feel so sorry for Tristan, that's just so cruel, and for Jason too...

And like I've said before, his dad is just sick, nod.

anyway, will be waiting to read more!

Oh and isn't it great when stories start to write themselves sort of speak? Hih, I think it is... though sometimes mine really start to go out of my hands... heh

person Rosei
schedule January 21, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Terrific story!! Love the pain and angst and so many possibilities
for plot turns and twists!!! Great feeling!!!

Thanks for the terrific read!!
R
person Mitts
schedule January 21, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Aw, you captured the angst so perfectly. Even though Jason is having a rough time of it himself, he still goes out of his way to care for another.
Loved the little interaction in the kitchen, with the other kids attitude towards him. And it was interesting to hear more of Jason's sad and sorry past too. That Jonathan has a lot to answer for.
Just a little amendment advice.....

“I know. You don’t have a choice though.” I said sadly and just held him while he sobbed, rubbing his bag (back) gently. I whished (wished) I had someone to hug me

Wow, I can't believe how quickly you update. I can't keep up with you, lol. Keep up the good work!
person Mitts
schedule January 21, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Beware Greeks bearing gifts I was always told!
Why is this Steve being nice all of a sudden? There has to be more to it than simple niceites.
Aw, I hope little Tristian is alright too, although, he sadly seems to be acclimatizing to his dire new life. But its always sad to lose a friend when you're all alone like that.

I can't get over how quickly you update! It's fantastic....