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March 16, 2008 at 12:00 AM
more, *gasp* i need more chapters. . . . :P
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March 16, 2008 at 12:00 AM
well damn. even if he was 'okay' with it afterwards, it was still rape.
i hope troy gets his own mental beating sometime in the future.
interesting chapter!
i hope troy gets his own mental beating sometime in the future.
interesting chapter!
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March 16, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Chapter 18
Where's the catch?!! There was just too much happiness
in that chapter!!! HA!! Nice to see Jason able to come to
enjoy sweet kisses, guess he never gets any from those
he may be attracted to.
If he has ever been able to be attracted to anyone.
Like the new development?! So... pops is out and will be back soon.
Too bad...
Thanks,
R
Where's the catch?!! There was just too much happiness
in that chapter!!! HA!! Nice to see Jason able to come to
enjoy sweet kisses, guess he never gets any from those
he may be attracted to.
If he has ever been able to be attracted to anyone.
Like the new development?! So... pops is out and will be back soon.
Too bad...
Thanks,
R
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March 15, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Poor Jason. He's such a good kid. Troy is a bit of a dinkus, since he continues to not get the extremely obvious fact that Jason is terribly abused. Hopefully he'll get an inkling now.
You've got me so hooked on this story. A lot of stories with continually suffering characters can get repetitive, but yours progresses very naturally. I also like that even though we are limited to Jason's POV, you show insights into other characters in a way that the readers will get, even if Jason doesn't. Troy's attraction to him, for instance, was obvious, even if Jason (poor puppy!) didn't get it.
You've got me so hooked on this story. A lot of stories with continually suffering characters can get repetitive, but yours progresses very naturally. I also like that even though we are limited to Jason's POV, you show insights into other characters in a way that the readers will get, even if Jason doesn't. Troy's attraction to him, for instance, was obvious, even if Jason (poor puppy!) didn't get it.
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March 15, 2008 at 12:00 AM
You really need to UPDATE! Im hooked on this. You're really great... few grammar errors and all, but it was amazingly done. And what the fuck is up with his dad anyways? One moment he's a bastard, and the next he's acting nice. I keep getting the feeling he's about to get screwed over really bad. Oh... and I dont like him with Troy! If theres going to be a pairing... i want it to be with Ben... hehe him and Mr. Annoying would be beautiful together, I think.
My only complaint= I dont like the title. Aside from that, this is beautiful! Love ya chick!
My only complaint= I dont like the title. Aside from that, this is beautiful! Love ya chick!
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March 14, 2008 at 12:00 AM
awww, poor jason!
i had a feeling that troy liked him other than a friend :]
i had a feeling that troy liked him other than a friend :]
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March 14, 2008 at 12:00 AM
yay for traxie!!! i love long chapters, you made me so happy!!!
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March 14, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Great job. It would have been interesting to hear the conversation that must have taken place between B and T after J left and you might consider explaining what's going through J's mind after the kiss. What does he think of T now, why he's as scared as he is, that sort of thing. But I greatly enjoy your work.
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March 14, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Awwwwwwwwwwww!!! T______T
I wonder if there's still a chance for them now?? I'm sure that Jason will realize (after a good night of sleep...if he can ;;) that Troy didn't mean to hurt him! I hope Troy will go back to Jason's house and try to explain...through the door even! >> If Jason doesn't want to let him enter.
Well I hope things will get better for Jason! And where exactly does his father go when he leaves??? And is Jonathan gone for good?? I damn hell hope so! Maybe Jason's dad killed him and now he had to go drive his corpse somewhere?! LOL Muahahahahaha!!!
Anyways, I just wanted to thank u for the great update!!! ^__^
I absolutely loooved it!! *grins* and I must tell u that I was pretty much jumping up and down when I saw ur update! :P LMAO hihi
Can't wait for more! Update asap! Thanks *hugs*
I wonder if there's still a chance for them now?? I'm sure that Jason will realize (after a good night of sleep...if he can ;;) that Troy didn't mean to hurt him! I hope Troy will go back to Jason's house and try to explain...through the door even! >> If Jason doesn't want to let him enter.
Well I hope things will get better for Jason! And where exactly does his father go when he leaves??? And is Jonathan gone for good?? I damn hell hope so! Maybe Jason's dad killed him and now he had to go drive his corpse somewhere?! LOL Muahahahahaha!!!
Anyways, I just wanted to thank u for the great update!!! ^__^
I absolutely loooved it!! *grins* and I must tell u that I was pretty much jumping up and down when I saw ur update! :P LMAO hihi
Can't wait for more! Update asap! Thanks *hugs*
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March 14, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Wow, thanks so much for the new chapter, It's great! I love it, that the story is taking a turn towards Troy and his uncel. Poor Jason shurely things everyone want's to either hit him or use him... Somehow I've seen something like this coning between him and Troy. Hope Troy'll turn out to be a realy nice guy in the end.
In my opinion you've made a littel stilistic error:
-- if I had turned to look back I would have seen a slight frown on his features.--
Jason hasn't turned back, so it's impossible for him to know, what he'd seen if he did. You can't build a phrase like that with a first-person-narrator.
Greatings Pierette:)
In my opinion you've made a littel stilistic error:
-- if I had turned to look back I would have seen a slight frown on his features.--
Jason hasn't turned back, so it's impossible for him to know, what he'd seen if he did. You can't build a phrase like that with a first-person-narrator.
Greatings Pierette:)