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for Pain and.. pain?

by traxie

person Infek
schedule April 3, 2008 at 12:00 AM
God, that nearly brought me to tears, seeing how much shit he has to go through. And I have a very pessimistic view on what Jason means when he decides he can't go through with that shit again. O_o
I do wondered about Kevin in the beginning of this chapter but in the end, I concluded for myself that he has no sexual intentions with Jason. I could be wrong though because Kevin's actions could easily be interpreted as something more. Aargh! I'll just read the following chapters.
Thank you for the update!
person Nikki
schedule April 3, 2008 at 12:00 AM
I love you story... I'm living for you updates hehe.. it's certainly getting me through my exams :D
person barrsa
schedule April 3, 2008 at 12:00 AM
ooooo can't wait for the next chapter!!!!! :D
person violetstorm713
schedule April 3, 2008 at 12:00 AM
I get so involved with your story. Each chapter leaves me wanting more. That's the sign of a good writer. I am able to clearly follow your story, and unlike others, I can follow the train of thought of your main character. Even though your title in "Pain and...pain", I find myself feeling hopefully for the Jason, the main character. Thanks for your hard work.
person kura701
schedule April 3, 2008 at 12:00 AM
wOw, I did not see Jon comming into the picture like that, very good! p.s. I love how you update so often, its a bright spot that i look to.
person Saminada
schedule April 2, 2008 at 12:00 AM
HOLY HELLLLLL!!! Jonathan??!!?! O______o
Can't that fucker just DIE??? He pushed Jason at the end of his rope! Noooooooooooooooo T____T
Plz let someone do something GOOD to him (anytime soon)!! He needs help! ;;

Man, that was a great update! but I'm BEYOND Mad at this point! Jeez, plz help the poor kid! ;; I can't stand to see him like this anymore! *sights* All those fuckers needs to pay for what they did (still do)to him!!!!

Anyways, I can't wait to read more! Thanks alot for the update! *hugs*
schedule April 2, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Ooh, nice twist with Jonathan. Jason seems like he's hit rock bottom. I hope things get better soon!
person cfweber1b
schedule April 2, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Jason has got to rescue himself - somehow. Can he even read or write- does the system even know he exists. I dont see the Keeper or Kevin or anyone stepping in. They just see him as a money maker. It is good but ack sad so very very sad.
person Tristram
schedule April 2, 2008 at 12:00 AM
That was great. I've been wondering since Jo. got kicked out by the dad if he'd just get J at the club. Looks like you're finally reaching the climax.
person memorietrail
schedule April 1, 2008 at 12:00 AM
So good to see you write more, its still very sad. Hope there is more soon.