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PLEASE PLEASE PLEASEUPDATE SOON! I love this story i've been watching it for a long time and love though it makes mesad i can't hope but tothink things will turn out good! Oh and chris is going to get his ass kicked! HIS an ass! like a major ass! but i think they might be good though...but his an ass and is going to get his ass kicked...i said that already...i mean with all his fight trainings and not only that but from abuse you pick up habits....either can't wait to see what happens...I love you! so you better email me back kk? good and stop reading this and writedamnit!...hehe ^^ j/k...but really..do that....i should too actaully >_> i shouldn't ta;l... <_< anywho bye XD <3

Yes! jason is finally going to stand up fpor himself. I know you told the readers not to join the Chris-hateclub but I'm seriously close to do so.
I like how you involved you can make me feel in this story. =)

Wow, thank you for the new chapter!
Chris deserves some good punches. Hope they gonna be friends eventually, though. A pitty Jason hadn't time to write down some of his past for Chris to read, maybe then he'd rethink some of his behavior.

Chris is such a brat! Punch him Jason! get Tristan's pic back!... hope you'll update soon~~~~ i can't wait to see the outcome....

I'm so impressed. This is an amazing achievement for a non-native english speaker. it's better than a lot of the work produced by native speakers. There were a few grammar hiccups in the latest chapter, but I'll leave those for others to pick at. I wanted to point out the error in your summary though:

It should be who's not whos, as the interest is belonging to the father.

I absolutely love this story to bits. I really want to see what Jason is going to do to Chris. And man Chris really needs to stop taking his frustration out on Jason. Please update again soon.

I just came back from vacation and read the last three chapters. This story just keeps getting better and better!!

It's great as allways, there are so many possibylities in this story! Can't wait for Jason to got to school, to the shrink, to meet Tristan, can't wait to see how things with Chris are going to turn out.
The keyboard thing has to suck.

Pierette:)

WOW! I love your story SOOO much!! I told my friend you updated and she FLIPPED! So happy! I'm so depressed for Jason! Chris is so unworthy of him!! We want Tristan to come back!!! (nagg) But I really only have one mistake that really bothered me: In chapter 32, close to the end, you have the line "...some sort of healthy wheat serials." But the serial you are reffering to is used to organize things. Im pretty sure you mean cerial- which is a delicious breakfast dish! Thanks for the amazing chapter! Update SOON!!

Hopefull Wishes(Love),
~F-J

Maybe you haven't noticed yourself, but Jason is getting whimpier with each chapter. In the beginning of your story he had some anger and attitude, at least some sense of self worth. That's what made him likeable and made me want to read about him. The way you write him now, he's just a stuttering and spineless child.
I like your story and you're a good writer but this is bothering me. Bring back the anger!