rate_review Reviews

Thank you so much for another chapter! I've fallen absolutley in love with your story. At the rate it's going I would think you could turn this into a small novel. I'd definatley buy it. Jason is such a wonderfull character, and you've done a great job developing him. I can't wait to see where Chris's character is going. Please keep writing!

Happy birthday!
Aaahhh... it really HURT that he didn't get to see Tristan! Damn! *sigh* heres hoping for next chapter... ;o)

First of all...a very Happy Birthday Traxie. May your wishes come true.
Loved this chapter. Ok so maybe Chris isn't as bad as I first thought. Maybe he's just a young man with issues and is trying to deal with them. I'm hoping J gets to see Tristan really soon. It would have been wonderful if they could have been adopted by the same family but I know J probably won't get adopted, he's almost 18. Is Kevin coming back into the picture? I hope so.
Have a great birthday. As far as hangovers...if you take pain reliever before you go to bed then you should wake up hangover free. Just something I picked up...:)

Sorry I haven't been reviewing the past few chapters. I'd first like to say that this chapter sounded fine, but I have some suggestions you might want to consider. At the beginning you say that he was mad at Chris like he'd never been, but that's not really true - the scene felt just like when he punched that guy in the whorehouse. You might want to make a connection to that, maybe have him worried about being spanked again. I like the interaction with Chris, because although he was a bully he's drawing Jason from his shell. Also, you've sort of just dropped Jason’s whole problem with sleeping on beds. I realize that he may have gotten over that while staying with Kevin, but this being a new area he isn't familiar with he might have regressed. That's what I would think anyway. At the very least you should have some small mention that he's broken the habit as appose to just dropping mention of it all together since it was a prominent quirk in his personality. Other than that, great job as always and I look forward to more!

I think i love you.


AMAZING STORY. <3

Wow, that was really good. Please let there be more soon ! Hope you had a great b-day

Nice. I found Christopher's change of heart very believable. Thanks for that! I think I will stick with this one after all. :D

seems like jason's gonna kick someone's ass o___o.
YAY!
but i feel kind of bad for chris now, seeing that he only was curious about what was in the journal and asking about tristan.
AH nevermind, he attacked jason and that still makes me resent him >:O!
=D UPDATE!

Oh no, you can't stop there I want to know what is going to happen. Please ,let there be more soon.

I'm trying not to hate Chris, but it is hard. The story is really coming alone. I can't wait until he sees Tristan, that will definitely cheer him up. He's had such a hard life and my heart goes out to him. Thanks for the update.