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by traxie

person carleigh
schedule July 2, 2008 at 12:00 AM
i wanna see what he bought him

oh, is that guy from where he used to live going to randomly show up again?
i hope not. ^.^

person BC13
schedule July 1, 2008 at 12:00 AM
OMFG you are like the queen of leaving off at clifhangers D:
schedule July 1, 2008 at 12:00 AM
oooh. what did Chris bring Jason. I wonder. I also wonder what is wrong with him. I have a feeling it might be something serious...Can't wait for the next chapter. Good luck in moving, yeah moving is a bitch.
schedule July 1, 2008 at 12:00 AM
NOOO!!! I can't believe you did this to me; to us! We wanna know what Chris brought him!!! *whines futily into Jason's pillow* (I love you Jason- get well soon) But I love the progress made in this chapter, though there wasn't much... still wanna know what Chris got him... And I officially love Chris, even if he was a total ass in the beginning. I love his mossy hair and his crazy attitude. I totally relate to him and I think thats why this love has formed. His character is like the universal friend that everyone wants... you know how to write 'em!!(me) So... update on time... PLEASE!! *throws cookie at your head to inspire and motivate*

Reading Words of Chocolate,
~Flaming-Jello
person Mitts
schedule July 1, 2008 at 12:00 AM
CHAPTER 38

And so the love of Jason and Chris grows ever deeper...sigh. I love how the green haired boy is trying so hard to be nice. And mucking it all up so famously, chuckle. Just how it should be in real life, nothing too slushy and sugar coated here. And, apart from the scary dream, nothing too much for poor Jason to have to contend with this chapter too, although...that note still leaves a nasty taste in the mouth.

Okies...here are the few things I spotted that you might want to take a look at.....

He grumbled, anger gone from his voice and tucked his pillow under his bed (head?)

I frowned and instead of joining him, went to his bed and sat down on *to* it. (No need for the word 'to')

What are you doing there?” He asked and (I) kept my eyes on the floor when answering.

“Then why did you get all jumpy and left (leave)?” He asked and tried to get me to look at him.

I heard (the) shuffling of sheets from across the room

I didn’t mean to scare you, I’m sorry.” Chris murmured into my beck (back)

I woke up in the morning in (to) the offending sound of Chris’ alarm. He groaned into my back where his face was buried between my shoulder blades and my lips curved in (a) sleepy smile

Chriiiis, you’ll miss the bus.” I mumbled tiredly and tried to poke him to (in) the side with my finger.

“I suppose so. I guess we can take it easy today.(") He walked closer and picked up Chris’ alarm clock

There we go. Hope that helped a bit...

person Elin
schedule July 1, 2008 at 12:00 AM
I love you and the fact that you update so regularly! Your story is addictive, and of constant high quality. Looking forward to hearing about Chris' past. Just an idea; beween Chris and Jason, wouldn't it be nice if Jason ended up dominating Chris when they eventually decide to have sex. He IS the most experienced, after all =). And it feels like playing the "other" part might be the only way for him to have sex again without a major freak out. Hah, just my two cents. Happy moving!
person dutsada
schedule June 30, 2008 at 12:00 AM
My God.. Chris is so sweet. is their relationship is gonna progress i wonder? or is poor Jason gonna be alone again until another person comes?.... but like the chapter nevertheless.... more ya!
person Saminada
schedule June 30, 2008 at 12:00 AM
O___O How could you stop there???

This was an awesome chapter!! I absolutely LOOOOOOOOOOOOVED it!!!! :D

It was soooo Sweet! XD ... I wonder how much longer that will last? T_____T

And gosh do I like Chris!! I wonder what he brought to Jason?? I can't wait to see! ^_____^

I hope those two will be lovers one day 'cause they're just too cute! =) hihi

Anyways, thanks alot for the update! I Loved it! *hugs X3*
person Anon
schedule June 30, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Ahh, your endings always leave me going crazy. If you weren't such a wonderfully constant updater, I think I'd absolutely lose my head. I loved this chapter. I'm pretty sure my mental image of Chris gets cuter and cuter per chapter.

Thank you so much for writing this story. I'm almost positive I've reviewed a couple of times now, but enthusiasm can't possibly be a bad thing, right? Thank you for updating so much and I really hope it keeps up.

person navajo
schedule June 30, 2008 at 12:00 AM
awe chris is turning into a swetie..but i wonder when he'll find out about jasons past