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lol...pink...omg...i would have loved to see that im pretty sure that tris will be more disturbed by that than green

I'm really liking this story. The characters seem very interesting and I especially like the emotional trauma. It's nice to finally have some happy moments, though. As far as the most recent chapter is concerned, I have to say that, while I thought it was necessary for them to go into the details of their past with each other, it seemed a little rushed. It was still a good chapter though, and I really liked the bathroom scene. And not just because there was a naked Chris. Although that didn't hurt. It's nice that, even after all he's been through, Jason still retains some of his innocence. It's also rather funny. Although I suppose this would be different from his past experiences because of the new emotions involved. His emotional connection with Chris would make these seem like entirely new experiences. As much as I'm enjoying these fluffy chapters, I really cannot wait for some more conflict. Especially the bit regarding the letter Jason got. A confrontation would be very nice. Especially with Chris there.

I think I liked the green better, but great chapter. looking forward to another.

Excellent story! Im so glad Jason has finally got a little bit of happiness. Keep up the good work, cant wait for the next update.

@___@ more please.

I just finished reading the 39 chapters that you have up here and I want to tell you that this story is THE BEST!! This is my favorite kind of story and you have pulled it off wonderfully. If I could, I would give you a hug and ask for you autograph. I think you should publish this.

You have really strong voice and a well structured writing style. You are a genius. I was so happy when I found out that you've read Kiix's stuff as well. I read Tentacles for the Brides Bouquet and I started reading the Vampire Saga when I found your story and wanted to read it first. I am officialy your ever-devoted fan.

Please, please, PLEASE update soon.

wow!!! This story just keeps getting better and better.. Just when you think ok... Bam something else happens.. Thanks for sharing i love it!!!

Loved this chapter. I hope Jason doesn't get really sick and have to miss Tristan's visit. And I can't wait to find out more about Chris.

Wow, this story's so good! I love it! Last time I skip over a story without reading a chapter first. Poor Jason,I think chris is perfect for him (even though Im not a fan of green hair lol). I hope Kevin's okay, I miss him. Great chapter, update soon please!!!

What's wrong with Jason? Has he caught a nasty cold? Where, or who, did he get that from? Oh no, if he's ill, that means Tristian won't be allowed to come visit on Saturday!!!! Calamity....

I loved how Chris spooned in behind Jason, just to help the poor sick boy get off to sleep. He's turning into a real nice guy.

Here's the things I spotted for you to take another look at.....

“Take your time, Jason. There’s no hurry.” Dr. Melwin said and made an conscious effort to not to bit on my lips. (Most of this sentence needs re-wording. Try this...."Take your time, Jason. There's no hurry," Dr. Melwin said, and I made a conscious effort not to bite on my lips.)

“How.. How much do you k-know? A-About my p-past, sir?” I asked quietly, dreading *for* (no need for the word 'for') the answer

It wasn’t the same thing *than* (as) living together, sleeping together.

I mumbled and shook my head a little so my bangs fell *over more* (move the word 'over' to this side of the word 'more') my eyes.

I was just waiting for *a* (no need of the word 'a' here) permission to go back upstairs and sleep.

I found myself under the scrutinizing gaze of everyone *in* (at) the table.

Chris shot at me but I knew he wasn’t really angry, I could *here* (hear) the humor in his voice.

I was awake when Chris came from school. I had just eaten lunch and taken painkillers and *were* (was) now curled up under double blankets in his bed

“It’s better to let Rose fuss over you, she *wont* (won't) give up

Whoo hoooo...Loving it as always. Hope to see an update real soon. Jason isn't the only one dying to know what the surprise is, lol