rate_review Reviews

RE: chapter one

Excellent character development, and background info regarding characters involvement and physical attributes. I love how she became aware of him and was being driven nuts by his muscles and proximity to her.

::chuckling:: I was laughing when I read her desire to clunk her head onto the desk to try to knock some sense into herself because of her obsession with the yummy boy. ;~D

I love the whole trying the girl against the locker bay and feeling her up and snogging, not to mention the dry hump. *WEG*

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RE: Chapter two

I love how the sisters both were teasing the three skanks and then the skanks gagging at the description of how to pick a bone. LOL

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RE: Chapter three

*SQUEE* OMG--that was so hot! ::fans face:: Damn, I'd love to be Autumn, lucky girl! ;~D

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RE: Chapter four

Bummer about Dominick's sister. I love his confession to Autumn about how often he thinks of her, and what it is he thinks of when he is thinking of her--Freaking LUCKY girl.

I hope that you get inspired soon to be able to continue this yummy story. Those of us that appreciate erotic stories, such as this, need our fix of smut, ya know? ;~D

Happy Holidays!

Yes to all! I find Dom very HOT because of a mixture of all those things. He's smart but physically attractive, sensually agressive but still gentlemanly, and has a fascinating habit of cornering our lucky girl when she least expects it, adding mystery and intrigue. Yeah, he's one effin' smexy hunk o' manmeat....*drools* Can I have him? ;-P

What a breath of fresh air, reading this story! (Someone mentioned it on the forums and I just had to take a peek.)

Hmmm...why is Dominick hot? I think it's because, really, every girl wants to be secretly swept away and ravished. The fact that he does it in places that they can potentially be caught adds that element of excitement, and the fact that he's good-looking, well-spoken, and seems to be, in general, a nice guy is certainly a bonus (who wants to get it on with an ugly guy with an IQ of 5?). So, I would say that it's not just any one element of Dominick that makes him sexy, it's everything combined (oh, and you've added that little bit of sadness to his life with the illness of his sister, which just really makes girls love him even more!).

The idea of the nerdy school girl becoming the secret object of the resident hottie's attentions isn't a new one, but you've managed to breathe new life into it. I think it has a lot to do with your prose. There are some really great passages and lovely descriptions (in particular, I love the one of April described as "unflinchingly beautiful"). Also, your dialogue is wonderful (I'm a sucker for well-written, witty dialogue).

Aside from a few grammatical and punctuation mistakes, I really can't find anything wrong with this story. If you still need someone to look it over, I'd be more than happy to help (e-mail: cu-kid_9@hotmail.com). Otherwise, you could always hop on the forums and request a beta there.

I'll be bookmarking this story and looking forward to future updates! Well done so far!

~cu-kid

You wanna know what makes him so hot cuz he's so attractive and can be this dominating sexy type of guy grrr I cant explain it. I am glad you updated Im on edge again!

Yes I read the messages, and the hottnes definately stems from a deep seated desire to be pressed up against something solid by an attractive guy driven wild by lust for me. very hot, good writing, thank muchl for sharing and please comtinue writing

Yes we read the messages, at least I do. And in response to your query about what makes him so attractive, the answer is (D) all of the above.

i love this sorry. it keeps me wanting more.

i think that he's hot because of his physical attributes (i don't know why but i seem to associate him with west from the tv show heroes) and the fact that he's so nice and yet so naughty to autumn. yep, he's hot. please update soon.

I'm absolutely loving this story. It's well written and all that jazz. Kudos! Please update soon. :)

Hey your story is very hot, I was hot from reading it. Not only that but you helped me break my writer's block thank you so much. *hugs* *loves* Oh yeah have a Merry Christmas!