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Ugh..tell me girl where did you get the inspiration for Dom? I think your dialog is just fine really but I can understand how hard it can be sometimes. His mom seems okay, I mean she isn't mentioned much but from what you wrote of her she seems pretty cool for being devious in getting Dom to walk Autumn out. He still didn't answer the question! Why is he keeping her a secret? Does he just like the mystery and thrill of having a secret relationship? If so he really needs to tell her. Umm...chunder....it's in that Men At Work song right? I just think your story is great and you have written it so well....now will please fess up and tell me where do I find a man similar to Dom? Please!!!!!!!

I think this ws your best chapter ever and let me tell you that I grew up listening to my mom read pablo nneruda, in sppanish of course! I live in mexico but I never imagined how it would sound in english but its woderful and yo constructed such a beauty in that scene it was just stuning for me you could end the story just there! because it is the most romantic thing I have ever read aand it isn't not a bit chessy gosh I totally loved it!

dom's mom is nice. i agree that their first time should be on a bed. i want to live in australia! haha.

*hands down* like the rambling,*wink*, love the story. And Doms mum was very perceptive it would seem.... wonder what she's plotting....

I´m so in love with this story!! Its great! ^^

I believe as authors we have the right to ramble at the end (or beginning) of chapters. It's right up there with "I have the right to string you along and make this glorious sexual tension and you can't do shit". ^^ I have been reading this story since it was posted, I just didn't know what to write. Other than you are automatically awesome because you hail from the land of Yahtzee (he's a game reviewer for The Escapist's website, funny dude). So, keep up the writing, you can do it!

Happily awaiting the glorious lemon,
Neko-chan

Please, please update. This is probably the best story i have read on AFF in a very long time.I would love to find out what his motives are. It would be awfully sad if he was just playing with her, but i have a feeling that that is not to. I hope it isn't so. Well keep up the awesome work.
KNH

(has also posted as whitknee)
I'm doing alright, since school's started back up for me..Thanks for asking...
YAY~ chapter~ it was funny, I was about to go to bed, and decided to re-read your story to get my mind off things... by the time I reached the seventh chapter, there was a fancy link saying there was a chapter 8. YAY! I'm so spoiled. ^___^
As to your questions, Dom's mom is cute, poetry was pretty, and funny since he was saying it while undressing her and doing oral, and your smut is fine. Not wooden at all. ^__^
one thing... why did autumn get angry so fast? I mean, is it build up of only having his wicked way with her when no one's around? or not confessing to his mom (which, how could she blame him for... I mean, it's his mom)... *is slightly confused*
^__^ but other then that, wonderful~ *sits waiting for next chapter*

i LOVE this story
omg its freakin awesome lol
but i wish the chapters were longer but still awesome :)
can't wait till the next chapter

The poetry was lovely and as for the smut being wooden...well if that was wooden give me wood anyday...wait that didn't come out right. What I was trying to say is I like your smut. No, I actually LOVE your smut. As for his mum I think she was cool and loved how he was acting around her. Sooooo sweet. Keep up the amazing work. Nellie