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January 17, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Finally managed to read your chapter *blush* was a little torn between work and writing.
Your characters are so well written, and I am surprised even more about Vespa. First I wasn't sure if I should
hate her. But this chapter made me change my mind about her and I am impressed about the turn, that she works now
with Daen (I hope it's not a trap).
Also I love the "romance" between Vespa and Veione :D it has such a soft tickle to my little "sigh in content" side.
Daen - she is really likes kids, does she? I wonder if it has consequences when she sleeps with Darcia, since a contraceptive was mentioned *grins*
He would have to marry her, so the kid won't become a bastard like him.
Can't wait for your next chapter - it's all so nicely alive and vivid.
Your characters are so well written, and I am surprised even more about Vespa. First I wasn't sure if I should
hate her. But this chapter made me change my mind about her and I am impressed about the turn, that she works now
with Daen (I hope it's not a trap).
Also I love the "romance" between Vespa and Veione :D it has such a soft tickle to my little "sigh in content" side.
Daen - she is really likes kids, does she? I wonder if it has consequences when she sleeps with Darcia, since a contraceptive was mentioned *grins*
He would have to marry her, so the kid won't become a bastard like him.
Can't wait for your next chapter - it's all so nicely alive and vivid.
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January 16, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Yay, another chapter! Meanwhile, the sub-plot of Vespa and Veoine is working out to be very interesting :)
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January 14, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Hello, again. Well I caught up reading chapters 24 - 27.
Glad in get some back ground info on Dracia. His parents not married - really didn't see that coming. Sad his parents were pulled apart when they were so much in love. Then Leoff learn why Terent hates Dracia. Huuummm. I wonder how Leoff will feel when he finds out that Dracia's servant Terent tried to rape was his sister.
Another thing I was gald to see was Dean and Vespa finally have their confrontation. However, I was not expecting a major knock down hand to hand combat fight. Wow, THAT WAS GREAT! Even better DEAN WON - and best SHE CLAIMED DRACIA! Just as well since they finally get another night together, which by the way was a really well written sex scence.
Lastly, Leoff is told that Vas is gay and I glad to see he is already dealing with it. I really like the part about Leoff feeling like Vas was a brother he never had. I just occured to me that Leoff doesn't have a brother and this new trust in another man would be like have a new found brother. This was really well written.
Looking forward to your next update.
Glad in get some back ground info on Dracia. His parents not married - really didn't see that coming. Sad his parents were pulled apart when they were so much in love. Then Leoff learn why Terent hates Dracia. Huuummm. I wonder how Leoff will feel when he finds out that Dracia's servant Terent tried to rape was his sister.
Another thing I was gald to see was Dean and Vespa finally have their confrontation. However, I was not expecting a major knock down hand to hand combat fight. Wow, THAT WAS GREAT! Even better DEAN WON - and best SHE CLAIMED DRACIA! Just as well since they finally get another night together, which by the way was a really well written sex scence.
Lastly, Leoff is told that Vas is gay and I glad to see he is already dealing with it. I really like the part about Leoff feeling like Vas was a brother he never had. I just occured to me that Leoff doesn't have a brother and this new trust in another man would be like have a new found brother. This was really well written.
Looking forward to your next update.
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January 14, 2008 at 12:00 AM
And again, another great chapter.
Knowing now that Vas is gay, and Leoff only considers him as some sort of brother is really a wonderful idea.
Most people start out a drama or a shunned love or big fuss - you made a perfect and rare difference!
Timor. Don't know what to think of him. My guts tell me to stab him!
I am waiting for your next updates *happy grin* luckily you are a fast updater weee so I have not to die from all the tension.
Poor Darcia - has no to deal with raids that started out earlier than anticipated. I hope Daen gets it under control and perhaps can help to prevent such things.
Knowing now that Vas is gay, and Leoff only considers him as some sort of brother is really a wonderful idea.
Most people start out a drama or a shunned love or big fuss - you made a perfect and rare difference!
Timor. Don't know what to think of him. My guts tell me to stab him!
I am waiting for your next updates *happy grin* luckily you are a fast updater weee so I have not to die from all the tension.
Poor Darcia - has no to deal with raids that started out earlier than anticipated. I hope Daen gets it under control and perhaps can help to prevent such things.
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January 13, 2008 at 12:00 AM
‘It’s so I can hear your heart, as long as its beating I’m safe, and I am
not alone.’
That is beautiful. So I guess he wasn't angry so much as turned on. *giggles* I love this story! And you are doing incredibly! Hey, you do know that if this ever hits bookstores, I'm the first one on line, right? I expect an autographed copy though! And a picture with the beautiful author!
*hugs tight* Keep up the amazing work, sweetheart. You're incredible.
Love Luinil
ficchantress1218@gmail.com
not alone.’
That is beautiful. So I guess he wasn't angry so much as turned on. *giggles* I love this story! And you are doing incredibly! Hey, you do know that if this ever hits bookstores, I'm the first one on line, right? I expect an autographed copy though! And a picture with the beautiful author!
*hugs tight* Keep up the amazing work, sweetheart. You're incredible.
Love Luinil
ficchantress1218@gmail.com
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January 13, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Chapter 27
Oooo... I don't trust Timor. I don't trust him, I don't like him and I think he needs to go bye-bye. *nods* Yeah, his behind needs to die. LOL
This is great. Poor Cira. I really hope Dean realises that she had a vision. I hope this opens up some doors for her.
You're doing incredibly and I am impatiently waiting for the next chapter which will, I know, be just as amazing as its predecessors.
*hugs tight*
Love Luinil
ficchantress1218@gmail.com
Oooo... I don't trust Timor. I don't trust him, I don't like him and I think he needs to go bye-bye. *nods* Yeah, his behind needs to die. LOL
This is great. Poor Cira. I really hope Dean realises that she had a vision. I hope this opens up some doors for her.
You're doing incredibly and I am impatiently waiting for the next chapter which will, I know, be just as amazing as its predecessors.
*hugs tight*
Love Luinil
ficchantress1218@gmail.com
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January 10, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Glass of iced water over here please **phew*** ;)
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January 10, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Hey again Dianna. Wow, you update fast!
Thank you so much for this wonderful chapter and the romantically completion between Darcia and Daen!
It was wonderfully and nicely written. Kudos.
You have such a great way of describing steamy situations without sounding cheap! I love that, I love your story!
I hate stories where they adapt porn-speech or describe sex like some gynecological inspection...
Don't crack your head over typos, that's what the spell-check from word is for :-) if you don't have MS Word, "open office" is for free and also good.
I have a friend who also has dyslexia and I know how frustrating that can be. She writes wonderful stories, with substance and depth - and some people keep being nasty about her typos instead of giving the story a chance. What good is a grammatically perfect story, when it is boring and without substance.
*bows*
Kynrael
Thank you so much for this wonderful chapter and the romantically completion between Darcia and Daen!
It was wonderfully and nicely written. Kudos.
You have such a great way of describing steamy situations without sounding cheap! I love that, I love your story!
I hate stories where they adapt porn-speech or describe sex like some gynecological inspection...
Don't crack your head over typos, that's what the spell-check from word is for :-) if you don't have MS Word, "open office" is for free and also good.
I have a friend who also has dyslexia and I know how frustrating that can be. She writes wonderful stories, with substance and depth - and some people keep being nasty about her typos instead of giving the story a chance. What good is a grammatically perfect story, when it is boring and without substance.
*bows*
Kynrael
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January 8, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Great story but, you have many grammer errors that screw with the flow of the story. This story would be even more enjoyable if used spell check. This is not a flame, but constructive criticism. Please check your spell.
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January 7, 2008 at 12:00 AM
*hums* this chapter felt so alive and vivid.
And the tension with some violent promise! Ha! I hope Darcia will be fair to Daen.
It's Vespa's own fault that Daen challenged her.
I love your Daen :) let her show some claws!
And the tension with some violent promise! Ha! I hope Darcia will be fair to Daen.
It's Vespa's own fault that Daen challenged her.
I love your Daen :) let her show some claws!