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March 11, 2008 at 12:00 AM
*bawls* B-B-But I wa-want Dean/Darcia! Waaaaaaaaaaah!!!!
Haha! This chapter was great! I love the suspense; the pain; the angst. BUT I. *bangs* WANT. *stomps* DEAN/DARCIA. *whines* ACTION!
Can't wait for the next chappie! I love this story...I've said that, right? And I'm still open to betaing, hon. *waves arms dramatically* OVER HERE! *beckons* PICKMEPICKMEPICKMEPICKME!!!!!
LOL
To anybody else that might read this review, no, i am not three, I just have a child's enthusiasm for this story and for life in general. I assure you, I'm quite harmless.
Love Luinil
Haha! This chapter was great! I love the suspense; the pain; the angst. BUT I. *bangs* WANT. *stomps* DEAN/DARCIA. *whines* ACTION!
Can't wait for the next chappie! I love this story...I've said that, right? And I'm still open to betaing, hon. *waves arms dramatically* OVER HERE! *beckons* PICKMEPICKMEPICKMEPICKME!!!!!
LOL
To anybody else that might read this review, no, i am not three, I just have a child's enthusiasm for this story and for life in general. I assure you, I'm quite harmless.
Love Luinil
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March 10, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Reviewing chapters 32 - 35
Firstly, Veione just blew her off - that jerk. I think Vespa give in to quickly and easily. She should have mad him work at trying to talk with her. Of course, I am happy they got together.
Next, Veione and Darcia are COUSIN!! Did I miss something before or is this just new. I knew they knew each other as children. It would have to be on Darcia's mother side, right? If relatives on his father's side are all dead, right?
Lastly, LEOFF FALLS A SLEEP AND MISSES DEAN VISIT!! Then, HE IS FOUND AND KILLS 3 MEN!!! YOU ARE COMPLETELY TRYING TO KILL ME, AREN'T YOU? The good part is Darcia seem willing to get a full picture, but I know you're trying to make me crazy before this is over. However, I will keep an open mind - after all Darcia should have most of his answers as to who is doing this. I mean the boy, Alwen, told Darcia everything and he knows Lord Educard's family is involved. He can get some info from Leoff and completely know who is really fighting against him, right?
Also, the writing in that last chapter covering Dean's life was just great. It was also heart breaking to know that everyone she trusted is not hunting her. What's going to happen when she is faced with Koto. What happend to the uncle that helped her escape, did he die from the bind or was he killed by the rest of the family? I just noticed that both Daen and Darcia have had their families take care of them as children, but betray and attack them later.
Always waiting for your next update, please be kind.
Firstly, Veione just blew her off - that jerk. I think Vespa give in to quickly and easily. She should have mad him work at trying to talk with her. Of course, I am happy they got together.
Next, Veione and Darcia are COUSIN!! Did I miss something before or is this just new. I knew they knew each other as children. It would have to be on Darcia's mother side, right? If relatives on his father's side are all dead, right?
Lastly, LEOFF FALLS A SLEEP AND MISSES DEAN VISIT!! Then, HE IS FOUND AND KILLS 3 MEN!!! YOU ARE COMPLETELY TRYING TO KILL ME, AREN'T YOU? The good part is Darcia seem willing to get a full picture, but I know you're trying to make me crazy before this is over. However, I will keep an open mind - after all Darcia should have most of his answers as to who is doing this. I mean the boy, Alwen, told Darcia everything and he knows Lord Educard's family is involved. He can get some info from Leoff and completely know who is really fighting against him, right?
Also, the writing in that last chapter covering Dean's life was just great. It was also heart breaking to know that everyone she trusted is not hunting her. What's going to happen when she is faced with Koto. What happend to the uncle that helped her escape, did he die from the bind or was he killed by the rest of the family? I just noticed that both Daen and Darcia have had their families take care of them as children, but betray and attack them later.
Always waiting for your next update, please be kind.
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March 10, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Wow. Deans story truly is so sad. Yet I like her response to Vas.
"But what they did to you--"
"Is in the past."
It's just so right, and only someone as sweet, loving and selfless as little Dean would not hold a grudge, despite what they have done and tried to do to her. Rahem is just perfect; I'm glad he helped her, even if it had to cost him his life. Please update soon! I wants to knows more! *bounces around in withdrawl*
*hugs tight! I love ya, girly.
Love Luinil
"But what they did to you--"
"Is in the past."
It's just so right, and only someone as sweet, loving and selfless as little Dean would not hold a grudge, despite what they have done and tried to do to her. Rahem is just perfect; I'm glad he helped her, even if it had to cost him his life. Please update soon! I wants to knows more! *bounces around in withdrawl*
*hugs tight! I love ya, girly.
Love Luinil
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March 6, 2008 at 12:00 AM
And the plot thickens! I. Love. This. Story!
Poor Dean. Her pain makes me cry, and the way she clung to him when he came to bed made me sob. It's so sad. She's been through so much, it's just so unfair that someone so sweet, so utterly selfless should have to go through such agony. I love that girl, and I hope she knows bliss soon.
I'm also really glad Darcia isn't automatically after Leoff's blood, but that's also because he doesn't know Leoff accidentally nearly killed Dean. If he ever finds out, he ain't gonna be happy.
Vespa and Veoine are just the perfect couple, and Veoine is just so cute and perfect. *huggles him*
I do hope Alwen survives. The poor lad. "Alwen, that sword is not you." That is a deep line. And she's right. Just because a blade is broken, doesn't mean Alwen is as well. Just because he was given something he was proud of, doesn't mean it became who he was. And it was not Alwen's weakness that broke that sword, but the cruelty of men seeking power and excitement at the expense of others lives. That sickens me, and infuriates me. Darcia, get 'em!
Dean: "Excuse me?"
Luinil: "And you too, Dean. Use them spirits."
Dean: "Thank you." *stabs Eddy the idiot*
I hope you update soon, Di. *hugs you tight* And if you need a beta, I'd be more than happy to help. Just send me a line if ya need me.
Love Luinil
ficchantress1218@gmail.com
raven_temptress1218@hotmail.com
lucifersayngel@aol.com
Poor Dean. Her pain makes me cry, and the way she clung to him when he came to bed made me sob. It's so sad. She's been through so much, it's just so unfair that someone so sweet, so utterly selfless should have to go through such agony. I love that girl, and I hope she knows bliss soon.
I'm also really glad Darcia isn't automatically after Leoff's blood, but that's also because he doesn't know Leoff accidentally nearly killed Dean. If he ever finds out, he ain't gonna be happy.
Vespa and Veoine are just the perfect couple, and Veoine is just so cute and perfect. *huggles him*
I do hope Alwen survives. The poor lad. "Alwen, that sword is not you." That is a deep line. And she's right. Just because a blade is broken, doesn't mean Alwen is as well. Just because he was given something he was proud of, doesn't mean it became who he was. And it was not Alwen's weakness that broke that sword, but the cruelty of men seeking power and excitement at the expense of others lives. That sickens me, and infuriates me. Darcia, get 'em!
Dean: "Excuse me?"
Luinil: "And you too, Dean. Use them spirits."
Dean: "Thank you." *stabs Eddy the idiot*
I hope you update soon, Di. *hugs you tight* And if you need a beta, I'd be more than happy to help. Just send me a line if ya need me.
Love Luinil
ficchantress1218@gmail.com
raven_temptress1218@hotmail.com
lucifersayngel@aol.com
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March 1, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Hey Diana. Thanks so much for your review. Actually, The Ritual is actually an excerpt from a longer fic my friend and I are writing. We've only got vague parts done; we role play the tale out on aim or on the phone, but there are many scenarios. This one was actually how we started it. We were bantering online about feet tickling and then it just blossomed into this majorly erotic steamy, hellhot sex scene which blossomed into a story idea which blossomed into a story. However, we're currently very busy working on a challenge and shooting the shit with other ideas too, so it may be a little while before anything concreet comes out of Siren and Lucifer. I can tell you this thing though; she was not always Sirenfire. In the beginning, she is Sira.
Tantalizing, I know, but you'll have to wait, darling. And hey, if you want to, please IM me at
raven_temptress1218@hotmail.com
or
lucifersayngel@aol.com
or
serenesiren1218@aol.com
I don't use that last one much anymore, but I'll throw it in for good measure. So if you've got hotmail, msn, windows live or aim, then feel free. Or if you have skype, I am
luiniltelcontar
my display name is
Aragorn's Mela
Okay, now I'll shut up. Feel free to email me too. I'd like to get to know the authoress whose got me drooling at her feet for more Dean/Darcia lovin'.
OH! I almost forgot! Great job with Veoine and Vespa! I loved it, and it really made me like her. I still must beg you that she and Dean become friends.
And another thing, I noticed that when Dean left to meet Leoff, she took bread and cheese, but she never gave it to Vas, nor did Darcia find it on her when he found her. I mean, that would have been a little suspiceous, don't you think? Did you forget she had it or did Sami eat it? LOL!
Just thought I should point that out because I was cunfoozed. *snorts* What else is new, eh?
Love Luinil
Tantalizing, I know, but you'll have to wait, darling. And hey, if you want to, please IM me at
raven_temptress1218@hotmail.com
or
lucifersayngel@aol.com
or
serenesiren1218@aol.com
I don't use that last one much anymore, but I'll throw it in for good measure. So if you've got hotmail, msn, windows live or aim, then feel free. Or if you have skype, I am
luiniltelcontar
my display name is
Aragorn's Mela
Okay, now I'll shut up. Feel free to email me too. I'd like to get to know the authoress whose got me drooling at her feet for more Dean/Darcia lovin'.
OH! I almost forgot! Great job with Veoine and Vespa! I loved it, and it really made me like her. I still must beg you that she and Dean become friends.
And another thing, I noticed that when Dean left to meet Leoff, she took bread and cheese, but she never gave it to Vas, nor did Darcia find it on her when he found her. I mean, that would have been a little suspiceous, don't you think? Did you forget she had it or did Sami eat it? LOL!
Just thought I should point that out because I was cunfoozed. *snorts* What else is new, eh?
Love Luinil
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February 29, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Just spent all morning reading your story when I should have been doing housework... oh well!
I have to say I absolutely adore it! At first I found your spelling mistakes irritating until I read that you were dyslexic... in which case what you have done is miraculous. I would, however, suggest that you try to get yourself a beta who could pick up most of the mistakes as this would only make a great story absolutely awesome!
Do please update soon!
I have to say I absolutely adore it! At first I found your spelling mistakes irritating until I read that you were dyslexic... in which case what you have done is miraculous. I would, however, suggest that you try to get yourself a beta who could pick up most of the mistakes as this would only make a great story absolutely awesome!
Do please update soon!
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February 27, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Chapter 32
Yay! More perfection from Diana! WHEEEEE!
Kind of sad though that Leoff didn't see Dean. But I'm glad Vas and Blake spoke to Dean, telling her things her brother would not. Leoff actually, to be completely truthful, annoys me a little at times. He is just so...so...bleh. I don't know. I love him, but he needs to appreciate people more and tell the truth. He can't always be so strong.
I know it must have a lot to do with his past, but honestly, he needs to get a grip and like, open up to peeps. *thwacks Leoff* Be a man, boy!
And that whole Serf thing? I loved it! Alwen don't play.
Sorry if I'm spelling the names wrong. I use a screen reader, so I'm not actually reading the tale rather than listening to it.
Well anyway, I'm off to the next chappie! *bounces happily away*
Please update soon! I love this story!!!!!!!
Love Luinil
ficchantress1218@gmail.com
serenesiren1218@aol.com
raven_temptress1218@hotmail.com
Yay! More perfection from Diana! WHEEEEE!
Kind of sad though that Leoff didn't see Dean. But I'm glad Vas and Blake spoke to Dean, telling her things her brother would not. Leoff actually, to be completely truthful, annoys me a little at times. He is just so...so...bleh. I don't know. I love him, but he needs to appreciate people more and tell the truth. He can't always be so strong.
I know it must have a lot to do with his past, but honestly, he needs to get a grip and like, open up to peeps. *thwacks Leoff* Be a man, boy!
And that whole Serf thing? I loved it! Alwen don't play.
Sorry if I'm spelling the names wrong. I use a screen reader, so I'm not actually reading the tale rather than listening to it.
Well anyway, I'm off to the next chappie! *bounces happily away*
Please update soon! I love this story!!!!!!!
Love Luinil
ficchantress1218@gmail.com
serenesiren1218@aol.com
raven_temptress1218@hotmail.com
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February 27, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Chapter 33
Oh you mean mean authoress! You cliffied again! No fair!
You also had me sobbing at the raid. I'm glad however that Darcia didn't tell Timer that the boy was coming. And uh-oh. Dean said her brother was coming but Veoine knows Leoff. Uh-oh!
Please pretty please update soon! This story is incredible! I have mentioned that, right? LOL
Love Luinil
ficchantress1218@gmail.com
Oh you mean mean authoress! You cliffied again! No fair!
You also had me sobbing at the raid. I'm glad however that Darcia didn't tell Timer that the boy was coming. And uh-oh. Dean said her brother was coming but Veoine knows Leoff. Uh-oh!
Please pretty please update soon! This story is incredible! I have mentioned that, right? LOL
Love Luinil
ficchantress1218@gmail.com
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February 26, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Amazing! You really write fast when you write :) Sorry for having not posted earlier. Since I picked up that job, my freetime has reduced itself imenesely.
I liked all three new chapters. And I must say, I really like Vespa now and I didn't before. I would call that a good thing, to change a reader's mind during the story like that *claps hands*
Oh, and chapter 13 is in the making. Just need to find the time to write more without getting pestered.
I liked all three new chapters. And I must say, I really like Vespa now and I didn't before. I would call that a good thing, to change a reader's mind during the story like that *claps hands*
Oh, and chapter 13 is in the making. Just need to find the time to write more without getting pestered.
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February 26, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Chapter 30
Hi! It's me again! Sorry I've not reviewed, my hard drive bit the dust and then I was out net for two months! *flails*
I like this chapter. It really sets up things to come. And my god, what will Leoff do when he realizes this woman he's going to murder is his sister? *eyes grow very round* Keep up the awesome work, Di! I'm off to chappie 31! *pushes to front of line and dives in* Hehheh...
Love Luinil
Hi! It's me again! Sorry I've not reviewed, my hard drive bit the dust and then I was out net for two months! *flails*
I like this chapter. It really sets up things to come. And my god, what will Leoff do when he realizes this woman he's going to murder is his sister? *eyes grow very round* Keep up the awesome work, Di! I'm off to chappie 31! *pushes to front of line and dives in* Hehheh...
Love Luinil