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for Never Too Old For a BabySitter

by sjd

person BennieF
schedule November 25, 2007 at 12:00 AM
You don't need to really make it "big/grand"......I guess what I'd really like to see is the guy getting it on with Rachel one-on-one one last time before the parents get home.....and I don't know, end it on a note that gives a sense of closure, or better yet, the beginning of something else.
schedule November 23, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Ohh I like this one.. Kinda had a similar experience.. it was fun Keep going i love it.
person BennieF
schedule November 23, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Looks like we've got a popular demand for one more chapter.

I think you should satisfy them. And maybe make the ending more rounded out....it was kinda abrupt.

And Catalina....really? Haven't heard of something like that in a LONG time....
person sjd
schedule November 23, 2007 at 12:00 AM
A grand finale, hmmm? well, if someone wants to suggest a scenario, I'll consider writing it.
person DB1
schedule November 23, 2007 at 12:00 AM
fucking hot!!

*DB*
person sjd
schedule November 21, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Thanks! :o) Well, it's done now.
schedule November 21, 2007 at 12:00 AM
That was so hot. Your writing is so good. I am so turned on I can't write any more.

Add another chapter. Please.

Why can't every babysitter have a hot young guy like that to share with her friends lol.
person sjd
schedule November 19, 2007 at 12:00 AM
I was going to add one more chapter (when I finish writing it) but if you think it's running on too long, I can end it here.
person BennieF
schedule November 19, 2007 at 12:00 AM
I have no objection to whatever you do at this point, you're one helluva writer.
person BennieF
schedule November 18, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Haha....ah geez....how long do you think you'll make this story?