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for Twenty-One

by LittleMissPerfect

person Anon
schedule December 4, 2007 at 12:00 AM
that it? thats the end? it barely began
sorry to be greedy but id like more
schedule November 24, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Loved it, except it bothered me that they kept clashing teeth, yet it was solved even thought they were both turning their head the same way. You lean left, and I'll lean right. Thats towards the same direction, so why didn't they hit teeth that time?
person Acal
schedule November 23, 2007 at 12:00 AM
I don't know why i haven't reviewed this story yet.. Its great. I love how you tease by separating it out in to so many different chapters. Can't wait for the next bit