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July 22, 2009 at 12:00 AM
ch3: wow. nicoli's temper tantrum was so believable. i almost got a little angry for him. the typical teenage angst and anger was conveyed expertly. well done!
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July 22, 2009 at 12:00 AM
ch4: i loved the tour of the town. especially the details about the fairy rings. awesome!!
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July 22, 2009 at 12:00 AM
ch6: riveting chapter, even though the prologue was pretty much cut and paste, I still enjoyed reading it!! and the ending was rather funny. I liked it. AWESOME chapter!
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July 22, 2009 at 12:00 AM
ch7: the vamp seems so human now. i like the interaction between the trio!
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July 22, 2009 at 12:00 AM
I have to let you know that I have read the last couple paragraphs at least 4 times XD Softie!Gavin is just irresistible ^^
It looked like you wanted your readers to share their thoughts about the method of "training" you came up with. So. I liked the visualization idea; it was fitting, believable and supernatural enough at the same time. At first I though the training wasn't hard or difficult enough to be deserving the reaction everyone's had after finding out that Nicoli would undergo it, though. Or Ethan's loathing of it. But then it was just the beginning. And it did become more difficult, even if we forget Gavin's little I'll_show_you hit. And even if one single lesson wasn't as excruciatingly difficult as I was expecting... it still made sense. It reminds me of jogging, sort of. A simple thing. Everyone could go out running. It's not too hard. The trick is to force oneself to do it regularly if one wants to see any effects. And yet I, as many, hate it ^^" So I CAN understand why Ethan could loathe an exercise. And why everyone reacted to the news the way they did. Nicoli's in for a hard training. He's going to be very tired for the next few... weeks? months? How often will he have to "exercise"? Will it interfere with his everyday life? Or will he build up some immunity to the tiredness after a while? As adorable the tender care he receives after a training is I don't want him to be tired all the time. What if those school bullies finally get him because if that? :<
As usual all I can do is wait for the next chapter :P
*hugs from a totally clothed kash*
It looked like you wanted your readers to share their thoughts about the method of "training" you came up with. So. I liked the visualization idea; it was fitting, believable and supernatural enough at the same time. At first I though the training wasn't hard or difficult enough to be deserving the reaction everyone's had after finding out that Nicoli would undergo it, though. Or Ethan's loathing of it. But then it was just the beginning. And it did become more difficult, even if we forget Gavin's little I'll_show_you hit. And even if one single lesson wasn't as excruciatingly difficult as I was expecting... it still made sense. It reminds me of jogging, sort of. A simple thing. Everyone could go out running. It's not too hard. The trick is to force oneself to do it regularly if one wants to see any effects. And yet I, as many, hate it ^^" So I CAN understand why Ethan could loathe an exercise. And why everyone reacted to the news the way they did. Nicoli's in for a hard training. He's going to be very tired for the next few... weeks? months? How often will he have to "exercise"? Will it interfere with his everyday life? Or will he build up some immunity to the tiredness after a while? As adorable the tender care he receives after a training is I don't want him to be tired all the time. What if those school bullies finally get him because if that? :<
As usual all I can do is wait for the next chapter :P
*hugs from a totally clothed kash*
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July 22, 2009 at 12:00 AM
ch9: F.L.S sounds like a great condition for Nicoli to have. XD
Felix. What a cute ghost boy. He sounds very much like an adolescent, despite his "age."
Felix. What a cute ghost boy. He sounds very much like an adolescent, despite his "age."
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July 22, 2009 at 12:00 AM
ch9 : i'm guessing amelia's a witch and her homeschooled friends are as well XD
poor nicoli.
poor nicoli.
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July 22, 2009 at 12:00 AM
ch 10: oh nicoli. heehee. well, the story most go on. i wonder if nicoli realizes he might have to subject himself to being fed from (and thus, getting another hand job, or possibly even sex! woohoo!!). haha. awesome chapter.
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July 22, 2009 at 12:00 AM
ch 12: wow biting into ethan's neck must've been so adversive. it makes me cringe. that's just gross. great descriptions!
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July 22, 2009 at 12:00 AM
ch 13: more mystery! nicoli's dad's job is sure to bring in some more juicy news. i didn't think about the witches when it came to the Hearts, that was quite a cool link to make.