rate_review Reviews

First off, gotta say I love this story as I finished the whole thing today. It's really amazing what you've managed to do with these characters and the level of depth their personalities and motivation have. Unfortunately, after reading the whole story in one great continuity, I have to say that I am much less attached to Amelia's character than the others. In fact, I would go so far as to say she's a thorn in the side of an otherwise wonderful story. Compared to the other characters, she seems so very flat. This wasn't as noticeable when she was more of a secondary support device, but now she's attached to Nicoli's hip to the point I wouldn't be surprised she doesn't get pregnant when Ethan and Nicoli have sex just by proxy. For a family so very inhuman in so many ways, they certainly are warm and fuzzy all of a sudden around a little witch. I don't know, it's certainly not -ruining- the story but her character literally makes me grit my teeth at times while reading. There's something indescribably annoying about her personality [or lack of] in many scenes. It's always a better practice as a writer to have a clear focus on where your story is going and who it's actually about. I'm not you, so I don't know if the whole story is going to turn out to be about Amelia and her deep dark secret. However, if this isn't the case, I don't see why she's being thrown in our faces constantly either.

Nicoli and Ethan have a really beautiful dynamic and I appreciate how you've managed to eliminate a lot of cliches between what could be a very standard relationship. Nicoli is so very confident in his sexuality and that's a pretty rare thing to have in stories in a genre defined by some poor stereotypes. Ethan and his family are also a refreshing break as you have taken a group of somewhat mismatched personalities and made them mesh together as a family unit that has an amazingly strong core. The raw pain that stems from betrayal is so well threaded in each character's personality that many scenes makes my heart ache at their suffering. Nicoli's scenes with Dimitri and Seth were well-written and I could feel his fear as well as his strength throughout what would be a terrifying ordeal. More importantly, his strength--his endurance--is actually very believable in the circumstance given what all he stood to lose. Owen is another beautiful character that has been twisted by circumstance and yet is so very easy to relate to and feel for. His past with Andre is very bittersweet and his run-ins with Nicoli have ranged from being frustrating to incredibly funny at times. It was so adorable that Owen obviously still cared enough about Andre to hide him in his utterly helpless state. It was a chilling reminder of how very not-human this family is when Andre was having to be pulled away from his human juice boxes.

There's a lot more I'd like to say but I try to always include a little of the bed with the good. With this many reviews and readers, I'm sure you already know that you've got a special sort of story here. Good luck with it, I can't wait to see where it goes. :]

Wow again that was fantastic!!!! I totally love this story!!!! I really can imagine Andre and gravin as such a cute couple!!!! I wonder if there is some love between the two coming our way. And this ansty breakdown of nicoli was so sad!!! He really had to let all the fear out!!! And I want to know more about that necklace!!!! Please update just as fast as the last time!!!! See you!!!!

Will you explain why the story is called what it is? I don't realy get it at the moment. Thx!

Well! I can clearly see that Andre has a crush on Gavin, the question is however; is Gavin the reason Andre took up with Owen in the first place?

I'm glad Andre is all right, though. It would have been sad if he'd died even though I do enjoy the angst of character death from time to time.

Wow, Andre and Gavin, who'd have thought. Will Omen reapper soon? And how will they get that locket off him?

Wow, well this was unexpected I'll admit. I didn't know you could update this fast! IS this your normal updating rate? B/C it's good if it is. Lovin this story lots. Def enjoyed the chappie. It's nice how there were no more action. They all need a break. I just knew Andre would be alive! I started thinking the person he previously liked was Gavin or possibly Mylo. Right why else would you say "Never Gavin?!" Hope we'll find out. I also want EthanxNicoli to develop feelings for each otha if they haven't already. I think Nicoli has. Also, do you have the rest planned, and is there any new stories or a possible sequel to this after this gets finished? I would love to read more from you! Hopefully you NEVA leave this site and neva leave writing here except if you get published. Anyways, Please update asap!

YAY he's alive!! So happy loved how you did it from his view :D and omg i loooove Gavin!! im so excited for next time!! Cant wait! Seth is pretty cool a bit scary but i love it!! XD im so curious about Nicoli's eye and the man..hahaha reeeeeaaaalllllly want to know more!!

OH MOTHER GOOSE. You have no idea what a happy camper I am at the moment! I come home from a bad day at work and a update of Moonlight Denial is waiting for me! It totally cheered me up!! Thank you! (glomps) XD First, I'm SOOOOOOO relieved that Andre is okay! :) And the Gavin/Andre scene? Hells yes. I don't know why, but Gavin is probably one of my absolute favorites. He's an enigma. :D He's so friggin interesting! The others are too, of course. ;) I felt bad for Nicoli and Cora, when they started crying. :'( They've both been through so damn much. Can't they get a break? Actually, can any of them get a break? :( And Seth? Yeah, he just became 10x as creepy. He seriously freaks me out and every time he encounters Nicoli, I'm so afraid for Nicoli and afraid of SETH. I really hope he never does anything too horrible, if you know what I mean. Or, ever really has the chance to. I'm still on edge about the whole mystery-man of Nicoli's. Is that what's next in store for us? I really hope so cause I'm sooooo out of theories and just WANNA KNOW already. But good things come to those who wait and/or patient, right? :D If it's something else, that's fine too! I'm sooo excited and have just one more thing to say! It shows what a great story-teller you truly are when the readers can become so attached with the characters and the world you create. I feel like I really KNOW these guys. The chapters have all the same atmosphere? Tone? Something like that, but they are also all very different; unique. Little by little we learn something new about everyone, get a peek at what is in these character's hearts and minds and I love every minute of it. :) Just wanted to let you know that. Sorry for rambling!! Xb I'm so excited for the next update now!! ~Bijou

NOOO!!! Don't take Andre! I happen to be quite fond of him. And God have mercy if Seth ever finds out about Nicoli's FLS. That sick bastard would have way too much fun with that. I'm thinking that Cora is probably not someone I'd want to tick off. I like my arms attached thank you very much. Great chapter as always. Can't wait for more. And prayers for your family. :)

AHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH Jeez i was on the edge of my seat hahah ohhhhh i hope he's ok!!!!!! Im so excited for more!!!! I really want to know Nicoli's past with the man i hope he comes into play soon and everyone finding out who he is ahhhh toooo exciting please update soon im looking forward to it!!!!!! And im glad that she is doing better!!