rate_review Reviews

I thought this was a great chapter! Smut is good, but when you’re actually writing a good story with a little depth in it, you have to lay off it for a bit.

What I really liked about this chapter was the way Fen dealt with Ethan’s depression. (For the most of it.) When Fen was first dragging him out of bed to go shopping I was thinking, ‘Well, that’s a good idea. Ethan cannot lay in bed for the rest of his life.’ But then Fen started getting a little rude and pushy and I started getting annoyed along with Ethan. A lot. But when Fen explained himself, it made perfect sense. It was a really good chapter for developing their relationship.

The one thing I would criticize is that Fen seems almost too perfect. I know he’s running away from people and I have a suspicion maybe he’s hiding the fact that Fen is really important royalty or something? Possibly even the future king? Or maybe i'm completely wrong. But that shows flaw in him.. But in his over all character he is just... almost perfect. It’s not too big of an issue. I'd just like Ethan to discover if Fen has a few random, out of the ordinary habits like everyone else. Nothing big, just simple things.

Other than that, I think this story is really great! Can’t wait to read more!

First of all, thank you for this chapter! I really liked it, and didn't find it boring at all (even though I do of course like the ocassional smut and how you write it).
I think you described Ethan's feelings very well. Most people probably feel guilty when their loved ones die. I know I can relate, at least. You feel terrible for laughing or just being happy sometimes, and I can only imagine that it must feel a whole lot worse when the people closest to you are the ones to die.
Oh, and I always laugh when Fen attempts expressions that he wouldn't normally use XD Like "kick me to the curb", that had me giggling.

i didn't like that ethan got so depressed again, didn't he overdo that? i liked that fen made him talk about it. didn't like ethan's past- that was seriously disturbing, and was fen some kind of stalker? i liked that fen understood how they could track him, but why can't he bring ethan with him to the other world? and aren't they going to settle down somewhere?? and by the way... omg i loved it soooo much *squeal* you have to update ^^ ...kidding :P

umm...i'm sorry, i'm usually one of the reviewers who beg you to update right after you do. Please don't be angry!!! I worship the keyboard you type on! lol
I'm not accustomed to wroting out reviews unless i'm complaining so perhaps my short reviews have been a good thing? But i shall try to make them longer and more constructive just so that you do update faster! lmao, just kidding.
I really do love how you answer stuff that comes to mind, like the whole reading of the mind and how it works. It is so well added to the story that it makes me feel very satisfied, and enjoying the story is so much easier with the well brought out sequence and emotions that are so completly valid due to the timing of things. I always get excited to see this story updated!
You have my full support! Take as long as you need if it will continously have this amazing quality ( just not too long or i'll die a little on the inside. not kidding)

I really loved how Fen decided to piss off Ethan to get him out of his depression. I had a friend who used to use the exact same technique on me. It was the only thing that worked. Really well written.

I'm not sure if I've reviewed like that, and I don't have time to check back so if I have I'm sorry. And it's more meant as 'I really look forward to the next chapter' rather than 'update tomorrow' and I'm almost always in a hurry but want to review nonetheless. Anyway, I really felt sorry for Ethan here. It really upgraded the believability in the story and made him seem a lot more real since he didn't just readily accept a strange man as his new life and instantly get better. Ethan's background is so sad... I was really moved by the shaving of the girl's hair. I don't know why but it choked me up.

As for Fen, I can't wait to find out who is chasing him and why. Also, he's got lots of money! I'd love to know how he got all that cash to buy an SUV just like that! So, yes it's a good story. Sorry this can't be longer but I have papers to finish and all that.

Yesss! Great chapter! I'm liking Fen more and more ^^

Absolutely Brilliant! I can't wait for more~

Oh my god, you are my favourite person right now! I love Fen, and how you made Ethan meet him was interesting. I'm still curious about Fen saying (something along the lines as): "I'm so glad to have finally tasted you" when they were first together...That should be interesting to find out more! And I really want to learn more about his homeland! What kind of creature is he really?. Oh I laughed out loud when he Fen said so openly "lets mate again" and the "options A B C or all of the above" LOL that was great. Hmmm what else? Ah yes, the sex is fantastically written. I love Ethan's "horsecock" comments *grins*

I'm sure there is more I wanted to say, but I'm a little..tired? *snorts* Please please write more soon. I have a thing about WIPs and I try to stay away from them, but I can never do so. Thanks so much for starting this! And I'll have to go and check out your other fics :)

Oh I almost forgot, could you email me when you update? That would be greattt :) Thanks again!

That was fucking weird and I totally loved it. Update soooon.