rate_review Reviews

I have really enjoyed this story! I love how the chapters are all deliciously long (even your short ones!) and how the story moves at such an even pace. I don't care if some people find the pace slow, I find it perfect! Very intriguing. I am eager to find out more about Fen's past, and see how things with Ethan progress. I am also curious about Fen's language...you mentioned it once in the past chapters, and I am unsure if it is a plot point, but I found it it interesting, so I was slightly upset when you did not pursue it. To have Fen speak outloud once (even during one of the naughty bits!), or is that to be saved for when we find out more about Fen's past? Either way, I can not wait for more! Of course I shall say "update soon!" but in truth I mean update well, for soon can imply haste, and this story is too delectable to be done quickly! So, update with all the caramel gooey slowness that this story deserves, and ensure the next chapter has me on the edge of my seat...again!

Totally cute. Fen is just sweet as can be! And he has other impressive attributes too. ^_~ Wish I had a guy like him. Please update!

Wow, I just found your story today and read the whole thing through. At first I thought Fen was a gargoyle or somthing, but he is much better than that, and sooo cute. And i just love how they interact with each other, specially when fen is reading ethan's mind ( fen does not have fur!!!). This is a really great story, one of the best original's i have read. Thanks for a good story!!

I just found your story today and I read from chapter one all the way to nine. You have to finish this story! I love the character development. I am sooooo curious to learn more about Fen and I love Ethan, you write him so realistically. A lot of authors try to make their main characters infallible to regular human error despite deep angsty flaws. It's clear that Ethan is deeply troubled but he tries so hard to make up for that and he deals with it at a realistic pace. It's not like he just woke up one morning and decided he was all better, it took a key plot turning event, well written..good on you! I'll be bookmarking this story and looking for updates. Good work! Keep it up!

I must say this has been an interesting story so far. I like how you incorporate reality into the story even though it has a tinge of fantasy/sci fi(which is a good thing, yay).

I love Fen. He's such a loveable fella and his innocence is priceless. *Hugs Fen*

Like I was stating earlier, you placed some reality into the story. For example, how Ethan reacts to most things and his mental illness. I'm glad you didn't let him just roll with it by making Ethan all happy happy and "I have no problems" guy. For example, people will write la la land stories where someone gets raped and immediately after, their hero comforts them and then they have sex and are happy yada yada. In other words, they don't deal with their pain and/or issues in a realistic way. A raped victim would be more hesitant, less trusting, and more fearful. They would gradually learn how to cope with it and eventually accept the relationship and sex. Know what I mean? I hope that was a good example. ><

And you're right. He's had it tough with the death of his family and the abuse by his foster homes and such. What happened is something likely that would have happened eventually.

Also...do remember...this is YOUR story. You write it how you want it no matter how many people complain or try to manipulate you to write it their way. Blah, it's not as if they're paying you! I always hate it when readers try to dictate the story...*rolls eyes* And if you lost a reader because of what happened in one of those chapters...oh well. Obviously that person is faint hearted and probably couldn't stomach dramas or sad stories...so I'd hate to see their reaction to Titanic or Atonement or something.

*pats your arm* I'm just supporting you. Just do your thing and write how you want to. Of course, you can take advice/tips from readers/reviewers, but never let them dictate you, which I don't think you will. Just in case. *winks* Well, I've enjoyed your story so far. Thanks a bunches.

to get this out of my system: Grrrr, i need more... soon. HELP! - ok, now onto the real review. I really like your story - the flow of your writing, the stlye, and the povs, and many other things. There are some parts that really don't make sense, but I think that it is more because, as a reader, I do not know who/what Fen is. As soon as that clears, I think the other parts will make a bit more sense and not be as jerky (think of the story as a ballet, and these parts that don't flow right as someone doing the robot in the middle of the ballet, it doesn't quite work). You write better than a lot of writers whose work I have read, here and else where, and that includes some writers who have been published. I enjoy the interplay between Fen and Ethan, and not just the sex scenes, but the emotional ones. As a matter of fact, these are usually the ones that are the most halting, probably because, as I've already said, I don't know what/who Fen is. I think perhaps a slip by Fen is in order. I know that you've done it with many things, the mind reading, the theivery, and "heirs." However, I think a bigger one is in order. Perhaps have them meet ONE of the "baddies" just maybe at a mall or something. But have the "baddie" be a friend, possibly. Something so that he has to give something a little bit more, like his species or something.
I really cannot wait for more and hope you update soon. :)
Sarah M.

Oh, hooray!! Once again, it totally made my weekend to see that you updated...and what an update it was! (I was so happy that, just as I was worried you were going to end the chapter, it kept going...wheeee!) Ahem. Anyway, this chapter was great, as always. I do so love the relationship that Fen and Ethan have, and the way that you've developed it. One thing I really like that makes Ethan just more and more loveable is how shy he is. It's very cute when he gets all nervous and blushy. Plus, I like the fact that he still has self-esteem issues. It just makes him more human, and despite how well he is adjusting now, he's still had a hard life and has been damaged by the world. And no one ever completely drops the scars of their past. So that cropping up just makes me love Ethan even more.
And before I forget, the sex scene in this chapter was incredible! Everything was described in the most amazing and hot carnal detail, and, as always, it just worked. (It's so nice that you never just skim over the yummy parts; when authors do that, it kind of feels like a rip-off, for lack of a better term.) As I may have stated before, I often get squeamish about stories in which humans have sexual relations with anthropomorphic...uh...whatevers, but your story and all of its steaminess is not creepy or odd. It works and it's absolutely gorgeous (in a naughty way).
I also wanted to say (again) how great Fen is. His open and calm assessment of all of the things that so clearly make Ethan wig out sets them up as perfect foils for each other. And all of Fen's candor gives Ethan no choice but to react, whether it be emotionally or physically, which is exactly what such an introverted, hermitted person needs. Plus, it is really touching to see that Fen loves Ethan so completely (and vice-versa), and that his faith in Ethan is not misplaced; you are carefully showing Ethan to possess all of the strength and beauty that Fen saw in him all along.
I'm excited to see what you will do with these two now. Presumably, the first arc of conflict (namely, Ethan's unmitigated survivor's guilt and his desire to die) is fairly well resolved -- though not abandonned, which shows great talent -- so now I shall be very interested to see what you will do about Fen's past. I know everyone is clamoring for you to just spill everything, but I like your pace and all of the details you so lovingly give us, so more power to you. But that being said, I am curious as hell. Can't wait for more of the fun conflict that helps make this story so addictive!
Thanks again for the great update!

I like your story. I love that you write long chapters. And I want to see this couple happy, and knnow more about Fen's past.

I disagree with any negative comments on the pacing. While there might not be a lot of PYSICAL action (in more ways than one *wink wink*) there is a lot of EMOTIONAL action.

You have a wonderful character arc progression with Ethan. You have a knack for drawing the reader into the life of this character. Fen, on the other hand, feels a little flat. From the bare bones that are seen I like him well enough as a character, but there no sort of emotional connection. While I know he's supposed to be a mysterious figure I think he's TOO disconnected. The reader knows next to nothing about how he feels. I've also read you "Love Me" and Van is the perfect illustration of what I mean. He's kind of mysterious but still very 3 dimensional because you get hints of what's beneath the surface.

Overall I really like your writing. It seems like you've really thought this out carefully and put a lot of time and effort into creating these stories, which i appreciate and admire.

Keep on writing! :)

By the Holy flying Chim Chim! Your story is so yummy! I absolutely love it. The story line, character development and flow of the story is fabulously well done. The way you put it all together makes me want to know what happens next. I've read your other works and your writing skills are so well done that if you were to publish novels then know I would buy them as soon as they came out. I look forward to your next update. Ja ne! =^,^=