rate_review Reviews

Wow... I've spent the last few days reading this, and I must say, I am so in love! I like how in teh beginging, you kept Fen a mystory, and the part with Ethan susaide almost made me cry! The sene with his family afterwards really spoke to me.
I love the depth that you give all your character, even the more minor ones seem to be more then just a pretty face and a few lines.
One thing I didn't like though was how slow Ethan seems at times. I don't mean to offend, but sometimes it seem like it takes him longer to process things then it does other. I'm not sure it this is just his character, but it still leaves me frustrated at times...
Still I love the story, you have a great plot, and your style of writing is supurb. I can't wait to see how Ethan takes his dream, and what he gits out of it! Please Write More Soon! ^.~

Thanks,
~Kera
(P.S. Sorry for teh sucky spelling... I'm really bad it, lol ^^;)

HOW IN THE WORLD DID I MISS THIS UPDATE?!??!?!
*phew* thank god I found it!!!

hahhaha okay. anyway.

when I read your "Please don't review with "OHMAIGOSH PLZ UPDATE SOON!" and then not say anything else." I was soooo tempted to do so. XD but nah.... not.... yet..... hehe XP

So yeah...
I so cannot believe i forgot all about checking in on this story... I guess, it was due to me being distracted by that and that and that and those and that and this.

But yessa! Finally! the wake up from the 'in fen's mind dream scape' into the real world... where.... Ethan's life is crashing down...
Holy holy holy crap man... This has gotta be terrible terrible for him...

Everything he said was true.

He gave his all, he gave all his love to Fen. But Fen had given nothing in return.

to top it off, fen lied. HE LIED!
such a bloody huge lie! and so many lies! and so many secrets! and what ugly secrets!!!
Fen just became suddenly a very very ugly and vile person overnight. This is a disgusting feeling. I cannot begin to imagine how betrayed Ethan feels. *sighs*
Then Lugh.... and how Fen treated Lugh... then Ethan being sorta like Lugh's replacement... Then Fen actually admiting to it. That Ethan was his second chance to redeem himself...

Ethan is, very similar to Lugh... Except. Lugh knew alot about Fen. Knew he was the prince, and that sort... But Ethan knew nothing.
And then suddenly knowing everything! its a whole big BANG BANG BANG WHACK BANG! and Ethan did'nt get any time to brace himself for the impact! not fair!

In a way. I can understand why Fen did all that... But... I also understand how Ethan feels, being treated like that, kept in the dark...
Fen wants Ethan to be there for him... but is Ethan strong enough for both of them.
Because in this relationship, neither one is more stable than the other. Neither seems to be more strong... Who will be supporting whom?
Can to emotionally weak beings be able to lean on each other for support, and not crumble instead?

So yeah...

Yeah...................


I don't know how these two will unfold in the future. Only you can tell.


okay! anyway.

"They'd met on his birthday, January third, " OOOOO__________OOOOOOOOO!!!! upon reading this line.... my eyes literally bugged. I was surprised. pleasantly so. ^_____^

then the dream, and the mist.... i cant recall, who has silver eyes??? I guess I have to go back and read....


Okay! Till laters! ;)



- nekoii

oh. i forgot...


OHMYGAWDS! PLEASE UPDATESSS!!!! this story is like so haaawwwttt!!! UPDATE YEAH!!!


(I just had to do that...) XDDD

Well, this story is just amazing! I read the entire 20 chapters in one evening and it's about 12:30 in the morning and I have class early tomorrow but I can't even be sorry about reading it lol. It's really good, and I love how there's some humor in there. I feel so terrible for Ethan and Fen! I hope they get back together soon because you know that famous line: "love overcomes all" blah blah blah, well it better in this story as well! lol love ya and can't wait for the next update!

I honestly don't even know what to say - I'm in awe. This is a wonderfully crafted, extremely well-written story that I spent most of my weekend reading (I've been yelled at twice and yet I couldn't put the laptop away. You're just that good.) Where do I begin? I'm new to original fic (mostly I read fanfiction) but I can see that I've been missing some great stuff. Your character development is incredible, and I'm akjgskjagksha-ing about the plot. Honestly, when I read this I feel like I'm reading a fantasy novel, you have fleshed out "Luftyland" in ways that leave me speechless (and a little jealous :D ) From the animals, to the plantlife, to the structure of the "castle", your detailing is amazing.

Ethan and Fen are both riveting characters, and you've delved nicely into Ethan's psyche, had him change and grow, and I loved every minute of it. Never was I bored or hoping the pace would pick up. You're very crafty in dicussing things that you know the reader would question (how Fen speaks in Ethan's mind, the language barriers, etc...) and the amount of thought and effort you've put into writing this is evident. You've given me something I can read and get lost in, which is awesome.

And you got me right in the back of the head but folding over the plot and having Fen be a catalyst in the death of Ethan's family. The flurry of emotion is so layered. You do angst just right.

Oh, and the sex is hot. Really hot. I'm still giggling over "Do they make condoms for horsecocks?"

Now I will go read the rest of your fics. And try not to sound like a stalker. OK? OK.

Your author's note at the end of the last chapter was very persuasive, so I registered for AFF just to review this story. Honestly, it's totally worth it to be able to express how much I'm enjoying your work and how much I'm looking forward to the next chapter.

I came across Rooftop by chance (it's only the second story I've read on this site), and I was immediately impressed. It sounds morbid, but I really liked the depth of Ethan's pain. I could relate to his guilt at beginning to move on, and though it was unquestionably dramatic, his suicide attempt was believable and somehow necessary. I liked how you portrayed his desperation and anguish - you have a skill for writing pain. (That's meant to be a compliment). My heart hurt for Fen while Ethan was being so abusive, and I'm glad you had him hold onto that hurt after he woke up from his healing coma. I like that you've made the necessity of trust in a loving relationship such a prominent theme in your story.

I'm grateful for the time lapses that kept the story moving, and I think you've done a good job with the pacing. I also appreciate you including sex (obviously, since it's such a prominent part of Ethan and Fen's relationship and also just damn hot) but not letting it overwhelm the story. It's hard to keep a balance in lemon scenes between giving too much detail and losing the pace of the story or skimming over it and letting the sex become dull and unengaging, but I think you've managed it well.

I was very happy with the way you adapted the story when it moved to Luftyland. You've developed an interesting world, and I loved your very visual descriptions. I really liked the way the story is progressing and getting more intense while still being manageable. The drama feels natural and realistic and is completely captivating. You did an excellent job of concealing most of Fen's past while giving little clues (his warrior hands, his growing up in the Flats, his same-sex Bonded being a problem because of heirs), and I loved the way you did the big reveal. I can't wait to see how Ethan deals with it and what other surprises the royal court has in store for them. This really is a great story, and you're an excellent writer. Keep up the good work!

I loved it:D Ethans reaction seems really.... Ethan, in some way. One thing that i really miss though is the sex^^, its been too long haha:P and I feel really sorry for Fen, i wish Ethan was a little more understanding of him, and had a little more compassion. Although Ethan was hurt too, i guess, so it would probably be hard to be^^. I love your story and cant wait until the next chapter comes up:D

did you look up dream meanings and then write that dream? it was... I don't know the word I want to say, but I did love it. I really hope they get back together soon.

Is it sad that their argument reminded me of a few I've had with my boyfriend?

i've always enjoyed this story and i love the Fen character but I hope you up date soon cause I want to see them get together and get past all this. They make a good couple and his fathers an ass someone needs to smack him really really hard! other then that it's wonderful i love the imagery of everything in the world that you created......i have a question about a different story so if you have time add me to aim or email but if you don't its all good

This is probably my favorite original fanfiction. The angst in this whole chapter was perfect, and I loved seeing the aftermath of Ethan seeing his past... it was really intense. Great work.