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June 21, 2008 at 12:00 AM
That is like the best story!!! *squeals* Wow...I just adored it!!! I remember reading a while ago and wondering if you were going to finish and it was SOOOOOOO worth the wait. No lie. It was awesome. Thank you for sharing such a wonderful story.
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December 31, 2007 at 12:00 AM
I love it!!!!!
This is the first story that i've read of f/f
and I think you did a fantastic job!!
Please continue,
Angel
This is the first story that i've read of f/f
and I think you did a fantastic job!!
Please continue,
Angel
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November 4, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Hey, ok first off you seem to have a good story line. However your writing seems a bit week and rushed, you may want to think about re-reading it a few more times before you post. Also you may want to think about getting a beta.
Oh, and one last thing, you may want to lay off the word "FUCK". It really drags your story down when the characters are saying it every five seconds, even if that is how they would really speak. It makes the story, and the characters, sound unintelegent.
Oh, and one last thing, you may want to lay off the word "FUCK". It really drags your story down when the characters are saying it every five seconds, even if that is how they would really speak. It makes the story, and the characters, sound unintelegent.
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October 5, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Hmmm. Interesting, I get the feeling that Ashlyn might have liked her befoe this started. I don't know where you're going with the story, well, maybe I do, but I'll be checking in on this one. Good work.