rate_review Reviews

I am really liking this story so far. I love he innocent naive aspect of Saori's character. I really hope that yopu continue this I really want to know what hepens next.

sooo good
keep it up
I NEED TO SEE WHAT HAPPENS NEXT!

So far I'm loving it!! Please continue to write this great story!! It's very original.... I know I wouldn't have thought of it! I like Ayden! He seems like such an interesting character though maybe hard to write! Well, thanks for writing such a great one!

I like how this is going, please don't be discouraged about the lack of reviews - it'll pick up - the good ones always do.

Interesting chapter. I can't wait for the next one! :)

What a great vampire story *claps hands in delight*
You have a very nice style and I hope there will be more to read, soon :-)

Well, Jacob was right... even if she knew about the situation all along, Ayden could still have warned her some time ago... she is a very sensitive, quiet person and he did come on a bit too strong... she just needs time and he needs to be more patient, althoug I have a feeling he's been more than patient for a long time... anyway, I hope they work things out... I'm dying to know what's next! :)

This story has been well written so far, I look forward to the next update

Chapter 2 was a delight to read! :) I love how descriptive your writing can get and I also love what you've done with Saori's character. You did very well moving your story from the fantasy section to the romance one. I think you'll get more reviews in this section.
Don't worry about the response... it can take a little while before people start submitting their reviews. Sometimes readers might want to see a bit more of the story before deciding to post their opinion.
However, you shouldn't always link the quality of your story to the number of reviews you're getting... I know that a lot of reviews frame a fantastic story, but that is not always the case. There are small auctorial diamonds in here that are overlooked or have a small response from the general reading audience.
You just try to do the best with your work, don't "rush" your story and I'm sure you'll get the turn out you wish for.

Very interesting read! I like very much the small sample you posted here. The storyline is original and your writing is very fluid. Your first chapter left me wanting to read more.
I just have one small suggestion if I may, please... it was very helpful that you explained some things before the actual story, but it would be nicer and make the beginning of your sample more appealing and less "technical" (by technical I mean, giving your readers some definitions to read before they read down further) if you could somehow embody that information in your story (for example through some explanatory dialogue or descriptive text i.e. describing characters or situations).
Overall, it's a story worth reading, I enjoyed it a lot... you keep writing and I will definitely keep reading! :)