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i wanna be abducted too........
so hot.
but food?
omg i would want some.

-sweatdrop- I don't necessarily disagree with richard, I just think that you should gather more intelligence than a years worth before trying to start a revolution on a planet with diseases and food you know nothing about.

First of all, that blushing slut comment was so hot. They obviously have some domination issues going on there, Richard obviously in charge. Too bad he's too straight laced and mary sue ish (male version of) to ever try his hand at bdsm. You know he'd enjoy having his alien tied up, writhing for him, while Richard brushed his teeth. HAHA!

I would hope that despite this trend, most aliens wait 3 months before trying anything sexual with their humans.

I guess it's a bit like falling in love with someone mentally retarded? from their point of view, I mean? I didn't get the feeling that some part of Chad would always look down on Orlando, though.

The whole submissive victim thing at first almost drove me away, but the way you worked the story, and how you explored the "they're so more advanced than us that it's ok 'cause we do worse with other species" perspective not just giving them the right but also showing they being advanced means they can do it better than humans do kept me going thru all chapters.



Btw, i got this idea, what do you think about perhaps a bonus chapter showing some diplomatic meeting between Chadann and some other big figure (probably not as high as Chadann since he seems to be pretty much il capo dei capi), the other important alien comes with his own human pet/concubine, this guy is well behaved, though perhaps a bit too uptight; at some point Orlando comes in and almost make Chadann loose his composure, the other alien is surprised and his mask is clearly starting to feel a tad uncomfortable, the concubine pulls Orlando to the side to reprehend him for acting so informally and interfering with the meeting. But he's quite good looking, enough give Orlando conflicting feelings, he is Chadann's but this guy is physicly quite appealing; watching their humans interact and seeing the feelings they are arousing (pun intended) on each other turns out to be turning the two aliens on, the other big guy is a bit uncomfortable trying to hide his reaction but Chadann being more confident and all instructs all the servants to clear the room and moves closer to the other alien, telling Orlando somthing along the lines of "You're mine and mine alone, but i would enjoy a little show, pleasure each other for your owners" (obviously "owners" would be "said" in a joking/loving tone, not the literal meaning) ; the other human is still on the fence but Orlando goes ahead in spite of his hesitancy trusting Chadann's judgment, the other alien is getting more and more uncomfortable but seeing the two hot humans going at each other eventually is too much for him and he reaches for his mask, only to be stopped by Chadann, at first it seems he is stopping him from doing an impolite gesture but Chadann actually wants to take the other alien's mask himself, and the aliens finally pleasure each other while watching their humans go at it.

Btw, perhaps Richards misguided heroism could turn out to not be completly fruitless; His words about how they were abducted against their will etc could've stayed echoing in Orlando's mind, and with more understanding and more in depth communication between him and Chadann he could suggest a few changes on how things are done; humans would probably still be hunted and abducted without much choice, but once in the planet, they could have this encampment where they are introduced to the culture etc, and they don't get frozen, they stay on the planet for a few years, remaining on the village while they aren't picked, and after these years they are given the choice of going home or staying. This would conserve the elements of the hunt of wild specimens from their natural habitat but they would still have a choice after learning and experiencing the alternative and not risk being frozen indeterminatly; way more politicly correct without attacking too strongly the approach chosen by the aliens. The whole journey from pre-abduction to living in the village to experiencing living with the aliens and then being given the choice could provide a whole'nother bunch of chapters with similarly engaging moments.



ps:yeah, i know, technicly they aren't aliens in their own world, i'm talking in my own perspective (actually, that is just an excuse for my lazyness, i didn't memorize the race's name and didn't felt like looking it up)

love the story but one thing lol are you going to do a book 2 on this. heheh

Fun read, but it felt jarring when Richard suddenly decided to become nice, hug Mary protectively and follow Orlando after they left the forest. Wasn't he supposed to be a jerk bent on wrestling power from the guy that was in charge of the renegade humans? I couldn't relate when he made that illogical switch in character.

Oh my gods! This was great! I have never read a story like this... or rather with aliens like this. This was amazingly funny, and emotional, and well written! *happy grin* I am super happy I took the chance to read this!

Thanks for sharing!!

WoW! This was so good that I did not want it to end. Very original characters in an often used (but in this case delightful) scenario. They made the story refreshing. Bravo! If you do choose to continue this storyline, know that I will be an avid reader. I thank you for the experience! ^__^

Wow.

I have no words. This is magnificent. It's wonderful. This IS science-fiction erotica, like I've never read before.

It's as if Ray Bradbury wrote both amazing extraterrestrial landscapes, and alien sex. It has the same spirit and wonder of classic science fiction authors. I'm serious. Maybe that's just they way I choose to imagine it, but either way, your story evokes amazing images and feelings.

On a more personal note, I liked Orlando. A more conventional main character wouldn't have felt the way he did, but still, he's a solid character. And that's a remarkable achievement.

You can tell I'm a huge fan of sci-fi :P This story fills in that gap of weird erotism and sex that's rarely explored, and it does it wonderfully.

Well done.