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Thanks for making me happy. Whenever I look on aff there's a new chapter from you. I really appreciate that. At the moment I'm quite curious where the story will go. So please go on, you have a faithful and waiting reader.

Hey Misty, so far I really am enjoying your story. One thing on chapter 22, I thought Nick was straight and I was a bit bemused as to his having been blinded and then suddenly goes to calling Vincent Master and getting off on the situation. I would have thought he would have been more resistant to those particular advances. Overall I'm enjoying reading your story :D Please keep writing!

You've DEFINITELY improved man!
You put more and more emotions in there and thats great!
I mean, without feelings, the characters sounds, dead and unrealistic... if u know what I mean! ^__^

I feel like telling u one more thing tho... and PLEASE don't take it badly!! >__<
It's about how Nick reacted to Vincent's touch... I must say that I found that part hard to read because Nick didn't seem to hold himself one bit! I mean he keep telling Vincent that he's not his pet and yet... he sure acted like one! I'm not saying that Nick CAN'T feel good when Vincent touches him or anything but maybe you should make it less "visible" to Vincent, just to let him work a bit more for Nick's feelings and thoughts! There is just so many other ways that u could've told us how Nick felt instead of him screaming it in Vincent's face! lol Do you see what I mean? I hope I'm explaining it right! >_< I swear to god that no matter what, I'm not half as good a writter as u are but... I can't help but think that it was a bit weird that Nick would moan like that after everything Vincent put him through!! >< Even if it DID feel good!
...Not now anyways! I u plan of making them lovers, of course Nick will express his lust then but why now after everything? What happened to his stubbornness??


Anyways... *is wondering if she's the only one who thinks like this...*
I hope not! oooopps
I hope u take this as a good criticism! And NOT a bad one! ^_^ I tried hard to not make it sound harsh or anything *sights* Man, I've never DARED say anything like this before to anyone so... it's hard on me too! lol T____T

At least I told u that u improved first! (you really really did!!!! no jokes!)
I do enjoy this story and I can't wait for more! *hugs x3*

....If u feel like hitting me then I understand!...(deja vu perhaps?)^^ ...and yes, I'm FINALLY done with all my rantings! @_@ hihi!

I hope ur gonna update soon! I can't wait to see how things will turn out! enemies?... hummmm that sounds cool! ^____^

Ok well, I think u know what I'm gonna say now right?....... Forger what I mansion on my previous post!
...Things like this always happens to me! I always comment when I shouldn't!

Anyways, I'm glad that Nick's back at his old self!
And that small kiss Vincent gave him befor leaving just made him one tiny step further to have Nick's heart! ^____^

Thanks for the chapter! *hugs*

OMG you blinded poor Nick. hopefully it is only temporary. PLEASE LET IT BE TEMPORARY.
First review for me. I usually don't review but to your story cannot stop.
Very interesting story.
Hugs,
Criss

OMG you blinded poor Nick. hopefully it is only temporary. PLEASE LET IT BE TEMPORARY.
First review for me. I usually don't review but to your story cannot stop.
Very interesting story.
Hugs,
Criss

I like your story. The only problem I have with it is that it's too short. More! I want more! Please satisfy this craving immediately.

Thank you.

Kiix :)

Argh! Nick is able to feel compassion for Vincent and he gets blinded- hope something turns out okay for him. Vincent so far is creep personified- really dont get why Sarah stood by him that much

You are quite fast in updating. I really appreciate that. Now the story becomes really interesting concerning the last sentence. I'm impatiently waiting for the next chapter.
During reading I noticed one think that actually confused me. Sometimes you let one person speak, but nearly each sentence then is put in their own quotation mark. So that confuses me, because normally a quotation mark induces a change in the person that is speaking. I know, that can be a narrative "instrument" to emphasize something. But you do it quite often and sometimes it's just to much, at least for me, because I get problems to identify who is actually speaking at the moment. In the last chapter (19)there was this paragraph:

“It’s so sad, poor Elizabeth!, I never would have expected Vincent to have the capability to love someone as much as he did his sister.” he continued “He’s so cold and domineering. It’s even hard imagining anyone loving him at all.” “He’s such a bully!” “I can understand, somewhat, why he turned out the way he has but that doesn’t give him a reason to think that other people haven’t gone through the pain of losing loved ones too.” “You’d think he was the only one in the world who has faced such tragedy.” “Well he’s not!.” “The crazy old bloodsucker should get over it already!”

Actually I did not know, if only Nick was speaking or if it was a dialogue between Sarah and Nick.
I hope you understood what I wanted to express.

But please don't be offended. I just wanted to help you. Perhaps I'm the only one that is confused about that.

Okay, bye bye

ahahh oh my... he was CRAZY!! evil, but crazy ahha which sorta makes him lovable in my book. Which is weird..haha but still!!! I loves me the crazies ^^;