rate_review Reviews

The sequel is under the author name brokenanglewings if anyone is looking for it

I love this story, this is the 6th time i've read it! If you still want a co-author i'd be happy to have a go with you (altough as you know i'm hopeless at grammer and spelling) please update MBF, i can hardly wait to see what happens to Nick!

I loved it, their personalities are the best. Sarah so collected and calm, always trying to put reason into those two stubborn men I took a liking to her. Vincent is just so cool and short tempered I really really like him, a big old vampire that doesn’t know how to cope whit his own feelings; and Nicholas, i love him so cute and funny, like the nickname the he puts to Vincent is just hilarious, when i imagine him saying that the only tough that comes to my mind is CUTE!!! so incredibly cute, how could I not love him

Hi.
I just wanted to say that I loved your story. I posted in fanfic_rants (in LJ) a while ago about how repetitive and unbelievable these type of stories were and it was just my luck that I found yours to see how they could be different.
I completely love Nick and his stubborn personality, that even, after all the things that his Master did to him, he didn’t break and submitted himself.
It’s believable and just plain sexy…good job picking a cliché plot and turning it into an original concept.
It was a good read.

Everything sounds. So short. And choppy. Kind. Of. Like this. Could use more. Details to embellish and help. Make the story. Sound. A lot more. Interesting.

So, talking normally. I like the concept behind the story, but your first chapter just like leaped into the middle of the plot. And then when you explained everyone's past, it's like you're making a jelly filled donut. You see there's a bit room so you shove more 'jelly' in. Other times it was like, Vincent and Nicholas danced slow and grinding, Vincent's past was terribly bloody he killed lots of people. Nick rubbed up and down Vince's body.

See what I mean? Kinda sounds weird.

Voting : My Beloved Fledgling
Cannot wait for the update

Yes, I think the sequel should have a new title. So we will know that this is the long awaited sequel :)! I look forward to reading more of Vincent and Nick's situation ^-^!!

Title wise how about:
1)my captor, my tormentor becoming my love
2)fledgling turning/learning to love
3) master and fledgling and or vincent and nicholas : realization of a journey
otherwise i think you should combine two of your ideas with something like the taming of the fledgling as the master himself is tamed

the last one.

My opinion is that you continue on same post.
So happy you are back.
Welcome back!!!