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February 7, 2011 at 12:00 AM
The idea of this is good, but it's really weak with discription. You should have more in there. For example this last chapter, one guy says 'tripple pentration' than it's like done, What happened to getting her ready? Laying her on top of one of the men and than the beginning pentration. You could put a lot more into this. But great idea.
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August 16, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Please do continue. Wondering what they have planned in the basment.
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August 16, 2007 at 12:00 AM
no thanks
i'd rather be raped than read another chapter of that crap
i'd rather be raped than read another chapter of that crap
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August 16, 2007 at 12:00 AM
It's too fast, make it a little slower with more detailed tantalizing pain. :)
It's good though.
It's good though.
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August 16, 2007 at 12:00 AM
There's no plot to this story. It's just rambling f*cking now. Not sure if u should cont. (IMO)
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August 15, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Just write it...
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August 15, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Mmm, go ahead and get the next chapter up.