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August 8, 2012 at 12:00 AM
intresting story but i cant find the first story The Cheerleaders is it still up or been deleated
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January 29, 2009 at 12:00 AM
In case the first attempt didn't get through
Welcome back. Great standard
how's Legend of Trelkoara: The Serpent of Sex
Welcome back. Great standard
how's Legend of Trelkoara: The Serpent of Sex
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January 22, 2009 at 12:00 AM
I love the original and this is shaping up just as well i hope u keep posting more wen u get time to rite them. and hopefully this time u enjoy it more
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January 24, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Hey it's my first time to review for the story. But I have to say that I loved the first novel It was grate.
You made your characters brake the stereotype of the roles they have in the society and show there true self.
Keep up it up you have a grate writing style cant wait and see whats to come...
and there is something Payden is hiding that got me interest that is going to involve the gang.
Please send me an e-mail when the next chapter is up I'd really like to read it.
You made your characters brake the stereotype of the roles they have in the society and show there true self.
Keep up it up you have a grate writing style cant wait and see whats to come...
and there is something Payden is hiding that got me interest that is going to involve the gang.
Please send me an e-mail when the next chapter is up I'd really like to read it.
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December 16, 2007 at 12:00 AM
You're a terrific writer, you really create vivid pictures with your words! Fabulous.
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September 20, 2007 at 12:00 AM
I’m glad to see you and the cheerleaders back I hope that this time you enjoy Righting the Return of the Cheerleaders more than you did the first one. I was just wondering if mayby you could update at least once a month. You are a good writer
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August 12, 2007 at 12:00 AM
keep going.......... :) :) :)
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August 12, 2007 at 12:00 AM
I can't believe youre going to continue this story, I thought it was finished!!
I've been a fan for a long time but I didn't start reading till after you finished the first story so I never bothered to review, sorry.
But anyway I love this story so I hope you post more soon.
but no pressure. take youre time if you have too.
I've been a fan for a long time but I didn't start reading till after you finished the first story so I never bothered to review, sorry.
But anyway I love this story so I hope you post more soon.
but no pressure. take youre time if you have too.
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August 9, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Dear AFF Readers,
Well, folks, it seems I have to eat my words (which, fortunately, taste great with barbecue sauce). When I originally finished writing The Cheerleaders over a year ago I had sworn never to touch the characters again, with the exception of the occasional reference here and there. My other stories are all associated with the Greenville Universe, as it became known in my head, with many of the characters being related to the characters who appeared there. The three soldiers in Dreams of Death are the grandfathers of the generation depicted in these stories, and Jason and Eileen from Trelkoara: Legend of the Serpent later became Greenville residents as well. But The Cheerleaders was a done deal.
Admittedly, the Greenville Universe is a fun place for me to work. Three of the characters are already running around with exotic pets (Jason has a black panther named Shadow, Stef has a black bear named Kentai, and Jim has boa constrictor named Snake. He’s green though.) as well existing in a world were gods and ghosts walk amongst mortals. Heck, the school itself was a miracle of modern engineering, with not only a tower, but a swimming pool, bowling alley, and a nuclear bomb shelter all tucked away inside of it. So if a few aliens were to drop by, some people might accuse me of jumping the shark, but as far as I’m concerned that’s all normal business when you live near the Franklins. I also made some friends writing the story**. (Consider this a shout out Storyjunkie!) So why did I stop?
Well, honestly it was because I was burned out when it came to the characters in question. They’d been kidnapped, drugged, mugged, and gone through just about every head ache I could throw at them. Worse, I’d made some stupid (in hindsight) promise to post a new chapter every week. That, more then anything, turned me off to the story. It was no longer about having fun in the playground in my head, it was about fulfilling some needless obligation to a group of people whom I had never met. Yes, I mean you, the readers. It stopped being fun, and it became a job. While I have no problem with the idea of writing for a living, that was not what The Cheerleaders was meant to become, and it did.
So why am I back, writing these characters who I grew to loathe? Well, there are two reasons. First, I was asked to by my family. Yes, that’s right, my family. My mother has actually done some minor editing for the story, my sister had read it, and my brother and father actually sat down with me over lunch and pitched me ideas, resulting in the new characters of Payden and Kevin. The other reason is that I realized as I was writing this first chapter that I had been unfair to the characters when I had decided to abandon them. It wasn’t their fault, after all. There were a few issues with their personalities that we’ve agreed to work on fixing, but that’s not such a big deal. (Any author who doesn’t consider their characters to be real people is either a hack, faking it, or both. Or they’re running around playing with someone else’s characters in a way they shouldn’t be. I know this is a fanfic site, and that that involves using other people’s characters. The difference is that while any one can write a Mary Sue, it takes a real author to take what someone else made and make it their own.*) I’m also going to try and move away from the kinds of villains I used in the first season/novel. Phil, Danielle, and Andy were a bunch of malicious assholes. This time around, while they might still show up, I’m going to try writing more classic Evil Genius types. They are simply more fun, less likely to screw with the way other people operate, and can have a plan fail without turning the main character into a major creep along the way. I will also be employing the same bonus chapter rules, for those of you who remember them or wish to look them up, as well as using the same code phrase to indicate which chapters they are.
So folks, the Greenville Gang is back again. I hope you enjoy The Cheerleaders Return as much as you liked the original. And if you haven’t read the first, well, I hope you just plain enjoy this one. As always, comments and criticisms are welcome.
{*The above is my opinion. It is not a fact. I don’t care if you disagree. If you want to make some point to me, fine, send me an email. I might even reply. But I give fair warning right now that I’m a stubborn bastard and you’re really not going to change my mind, so why try?}
** We are abandoning the Myspace page however. Quite simply, no one was really interested. Though if the original owner of the Vote For Kentai shirt still has the picture, can they email it to me at Foeofthelance@yahoo.com? My laptop kind of got deleted between then and now, and I lost the photo.
Well, folks, it seems I have to eat my words (which, fortunately, taste great with barbecue sauce). When I originally finished writing The Cheerleaders over a year ago I had sworn never to touch the characters again, with the exception of the occasional reference here and there. My other stories are all associated with the Greenville Universe, as it became known in my head, with many of the characters being related to the characters who appeared there. The three soldiers in Dreams of Death are the grandfathers of the generation depicted in these stories, and Jason and Eileen from Trelkoara: Legend of the Serpent later became Greenville residents as well. But The Cheerleaders was a done deal.
Admittedly, the Greenville Universe is a fun place for me to work. Three of the characters are already running around with exotic pets (Jason has a black panther named Shadow, Stef has a black bear named Kentai, and Jim has boa constrictor named Snake. He’s green though.) as well existing in a world were gods and ghosts walk amongst mortals. Heck, the school itself was a miracle of modern engineering, with not only a tower, but a swimming pool, bowling alley, and a nuclear bomb shelter all tucked away inside of it. So if a few aliens were to drop by, some people might accuse me of jumping the shark, but as far as I’m concerned that’s all normal business when you live near the Franklins. I also made some friends writing the story**. (Consider this a shout out Storyjunkie!) So why did I stop?
Well, honestly it was because I was burned out when it came to the characters in question. They’d been kidnapped, drugged, mugged, and gone through just about every head ache I could throw at them. Worse, I’d made some stupid (in hindsight) promise to post a new chapter every week. That, more then anything, turned me off to the story. It was no longer about having fun in the playground in my head, it was about fulfilling some needless obligation to a group of people whom I had never met. Yes, I mean you, the readers. It stopped being fun, and it became a job. While I have no problem with the idea of writing for a living, that was not what The Cheerleaders was meant to become, and it did.
So why am I back, writing these characters who I grew to loathe? Well, there are two reasons. First, I was asked to by my family. Yes, that’s right, my family. My mother has actually done some minor editing for the story, my sister had read it, and my brother and father actually sat down with me over lunch and pitched me ideas, resulting in the new characters of Payden and Kevin. The other reason is that I realized as I was writing this first chapter that I had been unfair to the characters when I had decided to abandon them. It wasn’t their fault, after all. There were a few issues with their personalities that we’ve agreed to work on fixing, but that’s not such a big deal. (Any author who doesn’t consider their characters to be real people is either a hack, faking it, or both. Or they’re running around playing with someone else’s characters in a way they shouldn’t be. I know this is a fanfic site, and that that involves using other people’s characters. The difference is that while any one can write a Mary Sue, it takes a real author to take what someone else made and make it their own.*) I’m also going to try and move away from the kinds of villains I used in the first season/novel. Phil, Danielle, and Andy were a bunch of malicious assholes. This time around, while they might still show up, I’m going to try writing more classic Evil Genius types. They are simply more fun, less likely to screw with the way other people operate, and can have a plan fail without turning the main character into a major creep along the way. I will also be employing the same bonus chapter rules, for those of you who remember them or wish to look them up, as well as using the same code phrase to indicate which chapters they are.
So folks, the Greenville Gang is back again. I hope you enjoy The Cheerleaders Return as much as you liked the original. And if you haven’t read the first, well, I hope you just plain enjoy this one. As always, comments and criticisms are welcome.
{*The above is my opinion. It is not a fact. I don’t care if you disagree. If you want to make some point to me, fine, send me an email. I might even reply. But I give fair warning right now that I’m a stubborn bastard and you’re really not going to change my mind, so why try?}
** We are abandoning the Myspace page however. Quite simply, no one was really interested. Though if the original owner of the Vote For Kentai shirt still has the picture, can they email it to me at Foeofthelance@yahoo.com? My laptop kind of got deleted between then and now, and I lost the photo.