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October 1, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Hate Peter.... he's such a bad jerk!!! Emily is cool! I hope that everything turns out alright! And Bryan is awesome! Maybe he will save the day! :P Thanks for writing!
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September 26, 2007 at 12:00 AM
i like it. i hope you add another chapter soon
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September 2, 2007 at 12:00 AM
the since of power and control. the unwillingness to give up. keep up the good work.
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September 2, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Might I say that this is a really good erotica fic that you've written and I hope you continue it.
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August 19, 2007 at 12:00 AM
woo awsome lol!
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August 19, 2007 at 12:00 AM
meh..I Expected a little but more of a fight from her. Just giving in..well I suppose she is in the weaker position.
good chapter though. and thanks for the final review on Caballo.
Starfyre
good chapter though. and thanks for the final review on Caballo.
Starfyre
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August 12, 2007 at 12:00 AM
That Meany ..but much easier to read with the spacing! Short but good. And he's a meany. Strapping her to a table. She needs to summon super strong magic and wallop him.
Starfyre
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August 9, 2007 at 12:00 AM
You've Got me Curious. That almost suave 'Sleep Angel' I love mysterious men who come off..so...so..there's no words. And I like magic. I'm into studying and learning about the different occults out there. From Wicca to Demonology. I have a story called My Trinity that involves Magic and Demons. This kind of reminded me of that story I wrote so long ago. It made me smile because I hadn't thought about that story in a while. I said I was sorry to it many times after that. lol
Yes I'm silly but anyways. I ramble. I like the beginning. Just a few spacing issues..separating the new lines and Paragraphs from the next. It would be easier reading. But that's only formating issues..not story issues. The plot is sound.
I look forward to more.
Starfyre
Yes I'm silly but anyways. I ramble. I like the beginning. Just a few spacing issues..separating the new lines and Paragraphs from the next. It would be easier reading. But that's only formating issues..not story issues. The plot is sound.
I look forward to more.
Starfyre
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August 9, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Woo!! Fukin love it. Quick write more of it!!!
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August 9, 2007 at 12:00 AM
'The Thug' Yep. That about fits. And Emily..Poor girl. A part of a collection. Magical creatures..elves. Yum. I'm addicted to elves. It's those ears. Though I likeLadossian style..the long pointed ears.
lol..Listen to me. Okay. Improving..I never try and say improve or not. It was just a spacing issue, that's all. The plot certainly doesn't need fixed or improved. I like it. Maybe the idea that someone else isout there and that other things are always around us, even if we don't see them, makes those dreams of Fantasy come to life even more for me. Especially when I see stories like this that let me know that I'm not the only one dreaming.
So Good chapter. Good..setting up of HIM..and his angel. Oh..I can only imagine. (I'm so naughty sometimes.) Moment done though. Keep writing and I'll keep reading.
Starfyre
lol..Listen to me. Okay. Improving..I never try and say improve or not. It was just a spacing issue, that's all. The plot certainly doesn't need fixed or improved. I like it. Maybe the idea that someone else isout there and that other things are always around us, even if we don't see them, makes those dreams of Fantasy come to life even more for me. Especially when I see stories like this that let me know that I'm not the only one dreaming.
So Good chapter. Good..setting up of HIM..and his angel. Oh..I can only imagine. (I'm so naughty sometimes.) Moment done though. Keep writing and I'll keep reading.
Starfyre