rate_review Reviews

this was sort of pride and prejudicey!

Love this story! I have read all of your stories and loved them all. This story makes me laugh out loud. Of course your author notes make me laugh just as hard. And I have been know to read them out loud to others! I both want to see how this story ends, and will be sad to see it be the end. Am hoping you will start a new story in the near future. I think the story has possiblities in the e-book world. And, several here have said that there has not been enough sex for it to sell well. I have read many e-book male slash stories with less sex in them than yours, and it seems like they sell well. The only thing I would like to see added to the story is a flash back to life before Shawn's dad died. And maybe a bit more fleshing out of his life. Does Shawn have any friends at all? Surely he has someone he at least shares cut downs with in class or something???

Anyway, the whole point to this mishmash, is to simply say, Great Job! Thank you for all of your hard work, and please if you have time, write us a new one!

That was sweet. Almost too sweet, but not quite. Can't wait to see what else there is in the future. But damn, I don't think I expected to Anthony to be the first to say it, and especially not in that way. It still fit, though.

I'm sooo happy! Those two crazy boys deserve each other. Maybe hearing those words will set Shawn's heart at peace. He is still my favorite character. Shawn and Keith are always sparring verbally. I think that sparks would fly in other areas as well. Anyway I read most of the story in one sitting and I think it would work very well as a book. There is not a lot of sex in it so you could aim it at the sixteen and older crowd. Maybe 18 or older. I think the story is hilarious while dealing with important topics, so it would have a good chance at getting an editors attention. Good luck.

I know its getting toward the end of the fic but I can't help but feel uneasy about everything thats going on. It feels like Shawn and Anthony are gonna break up! D: Anthony finding Shawn in Brett's kitchen isn't going to do much for Anthony's trust. They've been through alot so it would be sad for them to just split but shit happens sometimes. I think that Shawn should show Anthony someone from the bear community to show him that jocks and burly men can be gay! The only problem is, how would he found out since he doesn't have a PC. D: Keep up the good work. Can't wait to see how everything turns out!

CHAPTER 47
Sage, your fic is pretty good and I like it a lot. Not sure about this publishing thing, though. It would need a lot of work beyond fixing grammar and style. I am only saying this because you asked IN ALL CAPS LOCK, lol. But seriously, I'd recommend to find someone unbiased, for example an English major in your own university who already did an internship in book publishing and let them take a look. They might even do it for free, who knows.

Still got no clue what's going on. But oh well. Whatever.

I suppose there's no guarantee we'll know what's up with Brett.. though the good ol' rumor mill known as high school gossipers might give us a hint.

So in the meantime, I'll come up with another crazy ass theory about Brett because the original one didn't work out too well (hehe). Maybe Brett's tired of the Mr. Perfect image and hates all the pettiness that comes with being popular and a jock? Nah. That'd be too simple. Honestly, I didn't really pay too much attention to Brett when I first started reading and now I'm too lazy to figure it out on my own so I'm just going to make crap up. Yay this reminds me of high school! Except not really.

Damn. Oh well, I'll just write my own threesome, then.

Also, I think I've got an idea what Anthony told him, but I'm not telling till I've got confirmation. And Anthony in sappy comfort mode was awesome, and maybe just a bit weird. But in a good, we-finally-get-to-see-a-different-side-of-him way.

Crisis averted! Glad that Brett will be okay. ^w^ Now, let the lover's spat begin anew. lol X3 Am I serious? I don't know. XP Lack of oxygen due to hay fever clogging my airways is making it hard to think. X3

Biweekly? Two updates a week? OwO Yay. XD I look forward to it, if it does indeed happen. Will it? =3

Still like the story. Still want weekly updates. Still not appologizing to my ancestorys for my idealism in wanting Shawn to get his shit together. Im wondering what Anthony said to Bret. I don't think he outed himself. I'm not sure hes even outed himself to himself, so I doubt that he outed himself to Brett. Also, I was kinda thinking that maybe Shawn and Anthony would be done with, but seems like Anthony still likes Shawn. I mean he was saying nice thinks about Shawn to Brett. Of course, people can like each other and not stay together. As for publishing this as a book..Im not sure. I mean, obviously I'm reading it now, so I don't know why I wouldnt read it as a book, but I don't know much about the audience for this type of story. I do read some m/m books, but they more closer to erotica (Chris Owen, Jet Mykles, Jourdan Lane), and this story is seriously lacking in the nookie department...not that that's a bad thing. I just don't know about the audience for the non-erotica m/m stories. Of course, I'm speaking from a female perspective. You're gay, so I'll assume that you know more about gay literature and what that audience is looking for.