rate_review Reviews

Great chapter. Maybe the family could use a little counseling? Just a thought...I would think that would be part of the condition of kids coming back home to the mother. Just a thought. Anywho, great chapter and I look forward to the next.

Oh, but mushy is good! 28 was a rather depressing chapter, to be honest. Not something you should read before going to bed. Going to be thinking about death all night, dammit. I guess that shows you're a good writer, though. Made me feel something, even if it's a slightly negative emotion. I feel a bit sappy, too. But anyways, it was a very sweet and totally believable chapter. I could follow the words with that built-in movie theater of my mind, playing out the scenes, and there was no hitch, no gap I couldn't fill in because of lack of information. Good job, that doesn't happen very often.

At least in the stories I read. And that movie theater comment makes me sound a bit wonky, doesn't it? Oh well. Good chapter, praise and thanks for the cyber-cookies, etc. Sorry I couldn't start reviewing sooner, or I would've. Relative newcomer, you know. Cheers!

Oh, and I loved the mention in the AN. Narcissistic, maybe. But, hell, it made for a very happy human.

*graciously accepts platter of cyber-cookies*

"I put on pants, lest I be running around the house naked. . ."

Dear lord. . . the randomness, the sheer hilarity of that single line. Genius, I say. Genius. It's nice how, in the middle of a chapter about a visit to a graveyard, you manage to include such humor. It's really very refreshing.

Oh my. . . time for Anthony to meet the father. How. . . intimidating. I'm not quite sure I could handle something like that. Actually, I'm certain I would react in a similar fashion to Anthony, what with the bulging eyes and all.

Aww, so sweet. Really, a very touching soliloquy on Shawn's part.

Hmm. . . I wonder what Anthony was thinking. Actually, I do have an idea. Probably introducing himself, asking permission, etc. All the stuff a good boyfriend is supposed to do. Good for him.

No need to apologize for the sappiness. But a return to the action is welcome. Here's to another great chapter. *raises mug*

P.S. It absolutely made my day to be mentioned in the AN. I mean, seriously, I'm still high off it.

Awwww~ Hooray for resolving issues! ...If only a little bit. X3 The conversation felt very...real, I guess is the way to describe it. ^w^ And I can sympathize with Anthony. Even though my dad left the Air Force after the first Gulf War, I can only imagine if he somehow got shipped back to the Middle East...

*cold shivers* And he's just a mechanic! DX ... ;__; *hugs Anthony, 'cuz I'm a girl*

great chapter and love the PAN at the end. it's full of hidden facts about the characters. can't wait for the next chapter...oooo graveyard...sounds spooky.

I did have this nice review all typed up, but it disappeared. So here's the short version.

Great update, as usual. I'm glad they finally talked about their dads like that, it really needed to be done. I see it as one of the positive effects Anthony is having on Shawn, and vice-versa. I really can't wait for them to open up their relationship to other people. Whether that be to Keith or family or anyone else I can't think of at the moment. . . I don't care. Just someone.

Hmm. . . a graveyard, you say? Sounds intriguing. Can't wait for the next chapter.

I'd like to read the post author's note. =3 As for the actual chapter... I don't know what to say. That may be because I've been working for the past 13 hours on sixteen ounces of coffee ingested yesterday afternoon, though... *scatterbrain*

OMG! Cliffies are ebil! DX *goes to emo corner* Oh! But let me guess; it has something to do with Shawn's dad! =3 ...Wait, what am I smiling for? =(

God, what a good story. IMO, anyways.

And yes, I would like to read the PAN.

Oh snap, I think I can guess what the day is. I guess I kinda expected Shawn and his mom to get along better, oh well. Maybe next time lol. Great chapter, update soon please!!!