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Please! Can you fix the chapters?

AFF changed the formatting on their site. Is there any way you can fix this story? It sounds interesting and I want to read it. I can't even look at it now...

I admit. Once upon a time, there was a unusual individual dubbed Servium. This one, was not yet of age and yet sneaked on anyway. One day, while browsing the Slash section. They happened upon an unusual story, dubbed Black Star Cross. Finding interest in such a thing, they chose to read the sparse 4 chapters up so far. Finding love in it, they began to read every update until a tragic accident blocked them from online for many moons. Returning, now 4 years past to rummage through pages of bad stories. Hitting almost the 50 mark to stumble upon one so familiar. Returning to it in joy, only to finish all chapters in one sitting and cry at the end. Been a fan since day 1 of discovering the incomplete work, and am more-so even today despite trailing behind. Thank you for writing. One of the best things I have ever read in the slash section and continues to be this day. I look forward to reading everything you produce! Goodluck! And many thanks.

you know, I noticed that on chapter 19 Anthony said "I think that you should see a shrink", but a shrink is a psychiatrist, someone who can treat patients through medication, there are also psychologists, they are the ones who talk to patients, and there is also a therapist... bla bla bla, what I meant to say is, are you sure anthony meant seeing a "shrink" as in giving "drugs" to shawn?

REVIEW FOR BSC LAST CHAPTER (Epilogue). (perhaps i should have done that while reveiwing the other chapters eh? xD too late! )

y.sage.
er, hey. I guess this is the last review I will ever give you… for the story “Black Star Cross”.
And that was sneaky of you making an epilogue like that, what the hell. You went like point form blah blah blah. Then, you just haaad to blabber didn’t you… a whole 1,523 words!
But hey. Cant blame the man, he’s been at this BSC for, what, 3 years eh.
THAT’S FREAKING LONG! Gosh! But. That means im sorry to say that I wasn’t one of the readers who were with you when you first began. o_o
Oh well. Anywho, taking your rant to heart, I got what you meant with the objective of BSC. Thou your style of writing and opinion on plotline has really been an eye opener for me, in regards to the world of slash fiction.
In all my 4 years or so of slash fiction, I’ve been reading stories that you have mentioned as cliché and not so tasty. The real delectable morsels are rare and few, I agree (and they were rather on the cliché side too. But they were good nonetheless). Thou I admit, that I still hold a liking to cliché stuff, (there are good stuffs in ever story if you look properly). Hehehe.
With your stories however. They’ve absolutely and totally kicked the ‘cliché’ness out of the balcony window and splattering down 70 floors onto the asphalt. There’s the pros and cons. But it was educational indeed. And enjoyable.
So for that. Thank you.
And you reply to my emails! Thank you! It made me feel rather happy and honored to have the author of a story I was avidly following and reading reply to me. that rarely happens (to me at least).

Well y.sage.
I wish you all the best with life, and good luck with the moving, and coming school.
And… see you in your stories to come. I shall get to reading them. When my internet stops being a BITC-- *get electrocuted*

Meep. *smokes*


- nekoii-rin ^^~

(I saw ur email. but havent read it. because hotmail, now, decides to be a ***STAR***. cant open it... so you wait long long arh for my reply xD )

NOTE: y.sage. my internet is a bitch. So if you get repeated reviews or smthing. You know why…. xD sorry! ;p
and also why i didnt bother logging in to review. but, you know its me =P

Ooooouuhhh… jealous much? Or understanding.
But seeing as to how haywire shawn has been, im taking bets on the jelous then slowly when he realizes he cant do nothing but sit and watch, he’d understand… er.
But heeeeey~
I like your vocabulary and the way you play with it…
It makes shawn look sooo…. Interesting…. Hehehhehehehe~

NEKOII HERE

Whoaatdefreegginghellishgoingonmaaaaan~~~
And what’s with the whispering! Idiots! You are like alone in the room rigghhhttt. Why whisper???? God… -headwall-
But yea, it just adds question marks and huh huh huh’s to this story yea
More secrets to uncover! “What were those *whisper whisper* words of Brett and Anthony’s conversation”??????
Onwards! Anthony and Shawn. FACE OFF! *ding ding*

The hell. Anthony is so messed up.
But well, his logic’s still there.
In otherwords, Anthony is straight, unless Shawn is involved in the equation. Yea~

Oh and whoa, what gives the KEITH and shawn faceoff. Like eeerrr? Uhm? Yea? Uh-huh….
But wheeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeee
Finally, its like. Out. In the open. The feelings are clear and the confessions have been made. ABOUT TIME MAN! Jeez!

There’s one thing about being a healthy gay. And another about being a fucking-irritating flamboyant faggot. So there.
And aw kim. Don’t go all “brett in suicide mode” okay honey~
And develop! Development! Developing! Anthony and Shawn. Go go go~~~

But man! What’s with the vivid imagery of smell sight and taste?! Like whuuuuuuttt?
But… *wriggles eyebrows at you* being so knowledgebal via 3 senses, what does that say about thy’s own experience? Thy… is it thee? Or thou? Ah crap.
Onwards!