rate_review Reviews

Hi,

I really love you story.
I think you are still introducing more characters.
And their relationships are promising for an interesting plot, which I think the most important thing of a story.
My suggestion is the characters should be described a little more sharply.

Thank you for your sharing.

I reccomended your story on the forum www.aarinfantasy.com and believe your story will be loved by many ones.

This is a cool story i hope you will upload some more chapters that would be great. Keep up the good work.

Awesome chapter. This one revealed alot of information about the character's past. Look forward to the next one as usual. :-)

Oh and happy belated birthday! Yours is one day after mine!

I liked the back story about the General and his family. It was really sad but I don't think I understand Athios now. I mean if he was as suspicious as you said about the cause of death how is he able to leave the boys unattended with Mieri? I'm sure you'll explain all in due time so I will be waiting.

Found this fic today and have to say I'm intrigued; I especially like the hints about Quera/Tenaii; look forward to more!

I am slightly confused. I thought being born with the black hair was so rare that it was an indication of the 'chosen' interpreter? Wouldn't iadden? be it? I really like the kid and I would love to see him save the day and end up with Edyane?. I think the Death Whisperer language should be interpreted within the text because it is cumbersome and confusing to read the conversation out of context. They did giv ve me the shivers though because I knew the couldn't be trusted and Nlsieria? just appeared the fool to me to sell out this people to such a ruthless and disloyal race. I think he has really ocnsidered the fact hat he would be just as vulnerable as his country once the Alliance was broken. Also Meana doesn't seem so nice and loveable to me. I thikn they way he acts with his brother is very telling and that people are just blinded by his beauty without realizing that he is but a mere moratla and he also has ugliness inside.

This truly is an amazing work of fiction. The overall structure and attention to detail is what got me hooked and the characters are so well developed. The 'Trio' - Edyan, Quera and Tenaii compliment each other so well. 'But, the young prince noticed, they weren’t aimed at him. No. They were directed to his left. To his father, king Fenaleos of N’Alaera. His heart fell in that moment, disappointed, and the spell was broken.' That is perhaps one of my favourite lines. I read a lot and review very little, but your work is just brilliant. Keep it up, I look forward to the next chapter.

I hope you do well on the exams. And I am happy my answer pleased you. I am very uncomfortable with Iaddine being evil, I guess I pity him. I am anxious to see the Ethen around the king, I want to see their relationship. However, I was expecting the Ethen to have black hair, but is he not magical?

Love it. Would write more, but sleepy. You're doing a wonderful job.

..................Absolutely love it. I'm honestly at a loss for words.....well....no I'm not. The obvious chemistry between Meanea and Edyane was wonderful. I can wait for them to start sneaking around. But yet the poor King is sensing something already and I feel bad for him, especially because he seems to be a good person. I love Iadden's character! Keep going!!