rate_review Reviews

I love mpreg... ;D This story is great, have a good reason for the male pregnancy. Thx... "hugs"

Hiya, that was another great chapter. It was quite long but still very good. I'm a bit confused about Edyane being Maguenta’s hier as I thought Iadden was it. Although I guess the Eths may have got it wrong and Iadden is the one who can speak to Maguenta for the hier? It's all so interesting. Iadden is an Ethen, which I had suspicions about it seeing as he had conflicting natures. It also means that Edyane and Iadden getting together in the future is not as impossible as it could have been if he was an Eth rather than an Ethen. I'm sure the next part is going to be just as exciting and I look forward to reading it! Hope you update soon!

I am so glad you took the time to make this ch as good as it is. I loved it. The grammar and spelling were awesome. I am so sad to hear this is the end. But so much happened this ch i don't know where to start. First I thought the introduction of the Maguenta was ingenious. I wasn't expecting it at all. I thought he was like a presence or a spirit like being not a touchable visible guy who actually walked among the people. Also he sounds hawt! Of course now I get what you were hinting at about Iadden being important in his own way since he is the only one who can see and converse with the Maguenta one on one. Then again I am still worried about the upcoming death scene. I don't know if I'll be able to read it. Who am I kidding I would probably read it because I wouldn't be able to know what happened otherwise. Curses! At times like this I wish these stories had audio. :)

Banzai!!! Good bye Part I! Welcome to Part II!!! I'm looking forward to Part II. Just call me and I will come!!! HaHAha...Sorry..Kidding. The Ethen Iadden. OH MY GOD. It's so................CUTE!!! I think Iadden definitely hate it. He always want to be the best afterall. Well, he could become THE BEST DARK ETHEN SPECIAL FOR EDYANE. HAHAHA *laughing so hard* I wonder what kind of face Meanea would have knowing The DArk ETHEN is IADDEN and The Maguenta's heir is EDYANE. He love both of them very much. But is it enough to see both of them together? I don't know but I think it will be hard for him cause he love Edyane so much. You know what I mean, right? But I think he will be happy knowing The Maguenta's heir is Edyane and his brother is in a good hand. You know, I love the scene when Iadden and EDYANE's FATHER (GOD) meet each other. "I'm his father and he's my heir" OMG, I love it and to imagine how Iadden's face hearing that. It's so lovely!!!!!! Hahaha, Iadden always want to be the best and he think by becoming Maguenta's heir then his wish will be come true. Poor EDYANE! It will be hard for him. I pray for Edyane. MAY GOD BLESS YOU! AMEN! Anyway, SEE you

Wow that was another great chapter. It was so sad. Poor Delaen’niel having to watch Ryaen'ne suffer as he dies! And they only just confessed their true feelings! I can't wait to read more and see what happens! Whether the future will be changed or will come to pass as seen in the dreams. Keep up the great work!

(too lazy to log in)

I hope you don't mind me commenting, as I have only read upto Chapter 5.
These are all early questions, assumptions, musings and a study of some kind.
First, I love the details for the kingdoms, their 'religion' and traditions, lots of background story. :>
I can only imagine more if it was intended to be a real series of epic novels.
The characterization of your characters is amazing, from the thoughts around them and from the characters themselves.
You're one of the best writers I've seen here, you made me want to use my head!
But I want to be honest with you, from the summary, I assumed that Edyane really does fall in love with Meannea(sp?). I know he was fascinated with the Ethen's beauty at first, for the first 5 minutes maybe haha.
You see from this early chapters I can already tell that he was more taken in with Iadden. (Unintentional or not in your part) So I guess because of the summary, I am still going to wait for Edyane to fall in love with Maennea. Clearly (and I'm wary, but don't mind me), Iadden seems more important to the plot than his brother.
He already intrigued the Prince with his character, along with his looks!
The summary got me hoping and assuming, it's because I've already taken a liking to Maennea haha.
Ahh anyway I've only read till chapter 5, maybe something more relevant to the plot may happen, regardless if the couple I'm rooting for wouldn't end up together haha.

Oh and Iadden, yeah I do like him, and his young Ethen cousin!
I already pity Iadden, from what the other characters relate he is a kind person. But he is hateful in his ways, whether it's for different reasons or emotions, it all comes out as a bit hateful.
Maennea does not adore his brother, but he loves him much. Iadden on the other hand, I can say he cares for his brother as well, but not as affectionate as he could be? They aren't that close as I read, as much as I want them to be. I guess it's some Eth(an) thing. ^^

And Iadden is supposed to be wary of Edyane's early attentions for his brother because....? He cares for the Ethen, the King and their name? Or something else I feel. The first time he meets the Prince, he already feels something for Edyane, as much as it's suggested we think it's because of the typical reasons.
I admit though, that you're writing doesn't make it hard to like the interactions between Edyane and Iadden.
I certainly haven't read something that made me step back, and yet still made me want to read more.
Although I'm sorry I can't help but comment!

Oh and not to forget the human prince himself. Well he clearly is the main protagonist, and I can relate to him why he would also develop feelings for Iadden. Feelings of adoration or hate, we'll see. ^^
I do believe he'll make wise decisions.
He's got cool friends too. :>

Lovely plot, lovely story, beautiful characters.
If I can't be in it for the pairing haha (but really I'm speaking too early), the story is compelling enough.
And a lot has already happened in ONE day.. or so! Rich.
Now I'll just have to continue reading, the next chance that I get.
Thanks for the story, and bless~
You made my sleeping dormant brain work it's gears.

Poor, Prince! It must be hurt to lose your love one before your eyes. But It's still a dream. It can be change, right? Well, we'll see. There isn't any Edyane or Iadden here. Not much. Next time, maybe. This chapter is so DARK! So SAD. I love it though. Keep it up and see you soon

Wow, that chapter was full of surprises. I got so choked up when Rya intimated that he was going to die. That is such a horrible end even if he is protecting his love. I did figure early on that it was a dream like state Middy was in. The first scene of devastation was very vivid and you did a great job painting a scene of desolation. I am still trying to digest everything that Middy saw. Awesome job again. Oh and there were several word errors like witch instead of which and vicious instead of viscous.

Of course I´ll be reviewing and reading tis wonderful story, even more after this chapter. I'm very pleased to read your fics, not only because of your extraordinary imagination, but also the rich but also simple vocabulary that you use.
It´ll be lovely to keep reading your sotires, specially if I might know where it is heading.

Hope to read you soon.

Oooo it's all getting so interesting! Hehe Edayne was in lots of pain! I think he deserved it for being so silly! I wonder what plans he's devising to keep Iadden out of the war! I can't wait to read more of this. Update soon please!