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person Jenna T.
schedule July 19, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Chapter 4 I think - Honestly, I liked the old version better. Even though I didn't read the sex scene. Damn. Missed that. But this version is okay too I guess. I don't really care. Just as long as I read about X & Co I'm fine.
person Jenna T.
schedule July 19, 2007 at 12:00 AM
OH! And I voted.
schedule July 19, 2007 at 12:00 AM
wow
person k
schedule July 19, 2007 at 12:00 AM
This chapter was so sweet - I liked the interaction. I loved the sentence about the flame, 'Ed' wants. Maybe one thing coming out of his OW-time it the overcoming of the shame, when he is nudely exposed to onlookers.

Thank you sharing! Go on!
person kikib77
schedule July 19, 2007 at 12:00 AM
okay, i changed my mind. it's better than before. looking forward to the next update.
person Laur
schedule July 19, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Family

Oh boy....anticipation! He took another lover he is going to have one for everyday of the wekk at this rate. If X and Ed dont feel right it must be Sex or Az. Oh boy...cant wait. Update soon! I voted for ya!
schedule July 19, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Ok I have to say the first draft was ok,this was just amazing. really when you take the time to write, it is just wonderful and inspiring.
schedule July 18, 2007 at 12:00 AM
well what can i say
its great reading as usual u never disapoint though
i think the second chapter is way better i think i preferred the last prologue
but as said u r always a great read thank u :)
person k
schedule July 18, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Well, I like this version better and I deem it more fitting than the first. Still, I'm surprised Armor is out - I's expected Armor to curl in on himself and stay there - if only out of shame. I'd expected Marcus to be the one, finding the brothers... Still MUCH BETTER than the first version. Thank you for sharing!
person Laur
schedule July 18, 2007 at 12:00 AM
why Kiix??????

Oh the agony...he is still in Orel Wessel clutches.....tear!!!!! Oh well I guess I just have to wait and see what happens now. MANNNNNNNN! Oh! The agony.