rate_review Reviews

Please let him finally be saved(^_^)

Yea two chappies!!!!

Delicious...I am upset Kevin is dead but I guess it had to be. I cant believe that X shot Claudius. He is going to be furious later on. Keep the chappies comming.

Sad that Kevin died, but not totally unexpected. I like the rewrite much more.

I have a question/comment...

based on the previous 3 books, shouldn't X have been weak and the like after being shot in a place enough to cause him to vomit blood? And he got his armed bitten by a lycan. And the submission collar going off.

Hmm...Another crying session. Suicide mission -this chapter was omg , how cool! I just don;t know what to tell ... It was too much for an angst adddict that I am.

I'm a bit sad to see that Kevin is dead. I'm kinda hoping that you'll find a way to bring him back later.
As for chapter 7/3, I think you need to re-write it. Its doesn't seem to fit with the boy's previous thinking/mannerisms in the last chapters, and more resembles the older version. Especially since just in the end of the chapter, he was calling Marcus "Armor" and he was thinking of the name briefly in other chapters, but for some reason, he doesn't even remember the name in this one. I just think that you need to re-write this chapter to suit the flow of the other chapters.
I'm glad to see that X/S/A has a little bit of happiness with the piano. Maybe in the next couple of chapters, either Claudius or Marcus should find him playing one.
As a side note, I know its a bit late, but I like the Claudius journal entry as a teaser for this book, maybe not a prologue. The journal sets up what's briefly happened to the POD since Sex ran away and still leaves the question what happened to S/X/A. That's just my opinion about it.

That must be universal pet-behaviour. My dog and cats usually make me believe they hate each other but after I'm gone on vacation they are pretty close and give me the cold shoulder for days.

I really love the development of the second version. If Kevin stays dead, he should be buried next to Reggie. Armor sounds so determined talking about OW. For some reason I got the feeling he even hazards his death as consequence - punishing himself for 'giving up' on X. I bet the brothers won't stay behind. I fully expect Sex to try to burn the tapes before the family - especially Claudius and eldest brothers - get to see them.

I'm so curious about Skell meeting Claudius.

Update soon, please!

Chapters 6-7

Still getting my bearings straight!!!

I'm kinda turned arounded because I must have
read the first run through 3 times...
so now I've gotta go back and reacquaint myself,
with the real story!!!

Anywho, love it!!! HATE IT!! That Kevin's gone, but
they did make a pack,(and Kevin was no killer.)
Sad, really sad...

WOW!! He shot Claudius... Thankfully, somewhere inside
himself knew not to kill him and only to wing him.

OW HAS GOT TO GO DOWN!!!!!!
NOBODY DOES THAT TO ANYBODY AND GETS AWAY WITH IT!!!!

(Okay, Rosei is sitting down now!)

Thanks,
R

Yes, the chapter is back:)

Poor SkellT_T