rate_review Reviews

I started reading this a few days ago and just finished. Just wanted to point out a few errors, since you said you were going to re-write some chapters: there's one word that's a contraction, but you don't write is as one. Cant is can't. Also, you have your instead of you're, its instead of it's. The other contractions are fine. Oh, I also wanted to point out something that was driving me nuts: anyways. Anyways isn't a word. Ok, my bad. I just double checked on dictionary.com and it IS a word. Wow. Ok, so sorry. You do used the word an awful lot tho. Ok, enough with the critique.

The story is fantastic! You have such an original idea, a story taking place in a mental facility! Your writing is terrific, the dialogue flows from character to character, and what characters they are! OMG, love them all! Especially Salem (love the name btw; your story is the third I've read w/a character name of Salem) and Lucius. The name reminds me of Lucius Malfoy that shit of a death eater from Harry Potter. OMG, Salem tried to look like Harry Potter for Halloween; too funny! I just got that! lol

Anyway.....your characters are so flawed that it's a pleasure to read what they say (did that make sense?) I love how Salem is trying to diagnose Lucius all the time; telling him his meds are all screwed up! I absolutely LOVE this story and hope you do continue with it.

I can't wait to find out what happens to poor Salem in the dreaded Lot D! hahha Oh, also, I was laughing hysterically when Salem wrote the letter to Kiernan asking him to bring all his stuff, including lube and condoms; priceless!!!!! So...who is he thinking of using these items on, pray tell???? hahahha

I hope you update quickly!!!!! This story is too good to be left unwritten!

Please keep writing this story. I really like it and I like your writing style. I hate it when writers start a story and then don't finish it, especially when it is actually a really good story, so please don't stop writing.

Hiya, just finished reading all 16 of the chapters you have uploaded and i cant wait for another XD
the way you write the story actually makes you want to read the next chapter. You always end it at a point that leave us begging for more.

cant wait for the next chapter!

Ahh, I've read this all in one go, and it's really really great!!

I must say, I love Salaem, haha he's so ....awesome! I didn't see this coming, D Lot? Gah! I need to know what is going to happen to him! Please update soon, T_T~

Wow, I'd been waiting for for an update for so long. I love the story, you shouldn't give up ;). I also liked the chapter, it made me laugh in ceratin parts haha, but yeah, Salem has the right to be mean to his brother, but you can see they do love each other.
Can't wait for the next chapter!

i've always found this story interesting :3 keep writing, i love reading it.

aha! i knew it was kiernan! how is he going to react?
ASOTA

Wow, I really like this story. I couldn't stop reading until I finished it, around 4 am. I just wanted to tell you to keep updating =D!

:O How can you end it there!! Really enjoying this fic, roll on teh next chappie!! xx

you FINALLY updated X3

your story is so interesting! :o i'm always waiting for updates, even if they are few and far between. :3