rate_review Reviews

A rather somber ending, but considering the circumstances, it's fitting.

Great job! Keep up the good work!

Spacing and a few grammatical errors aside (I noticed one or two in each chapter, you might want to change that quickly), your story was very well-written, your sense of imagery was stunning, and your character-building was flawless. Kathryn and Travis' sexual encounter was nothing short of beautiful and realistic.

Keep up the excellent work! I'll be keeping an eye out for this one.

Interesting, unusual, well thought out and... good.

yea...i can relate my first time was just as painful and unpleasent

just a tip...if you pace the sentences out more, like other writers do it makes it easier for the reader to read it and they're more likely too... most of the time when i open a story if it's not properly spaced i just exit it without reading the story.

the freckle thing was cute and it was a good story

Enjoying it so far and yeah most stories make losing your virginity full of sunshine and roses *tuts* well done for not! And I loved the little interchange between the boys, bless em! Keep on writing hun xxx

hey its me again :)... i don't think i really have a life out of fan fiction... anyway, this chapter was good, the butt thing was unusual... i sometimes wonder how far guys will actually lie to sleep with someone...lol

yea i agree in all these stories it really annoys me cause they're like "it only hurt for a second and then it was all pleasure"... that tends to get on my nerves

anyway i hope to see more :)