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June 29, 2007 at 12:00 AM
So, things are getting more dangerous and interesting... I just hope the psycho won't hurt Gray's family... slim chance, but I still hope... Gray should have been a bit more careful when he left his house. He should have taken a few more important things with him than just a few clothes... on the other hand, I can understand him and his panic...
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June 29, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Hmm...A very well-written chapter, except the correct spelling is 'piqued', if I'm not mistaken.
Putting Grey's parents into the mix is something quite devious and not what I had expected in the least. It's good to know you can still surprise your readers when all avenues of suspense have supposedly been used.
Good job. Keep up the good work!
Putting Grey's parents into the mix is something quite devious and not what I had expected in the least. It's good to know you can still surprise your readers when all avenues of suspense have supposedly been used.
Good job. Keep up the good work!
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June 26, 2007 at 12:00 AM
More more more :D
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June 23, 2007 at 12:00 AM
I seriously want to know what happened to the psycho... did he follow them? Grey Holmes is dreamy, hands down... you did a good job with him. :)
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June 23, 2007 at 12:00 AM
why exactly hasn't the cops put them into protective custody?
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June 22, 2007 at 12:00 AM
I noticed one spelling mistake, and only one, simply because it may have been THE only one.
"He passed her a plate and took one of his on, setting it down on the table."
Other than that, the chapter was well-written. Keep up the good work!
"He passed her a plate and took one of his on, setting it down on the table."
Other than that, the chapter was well-written. Keep up the good work!
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June 22, 2007 at 12:00 AM
(gives standing ovation and then bows at your feet) great chapters hun, really good story line...even if you do leave me hanging more than i'd like lol
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June 20, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Very good update! I, too, didn't get why they didn't call the police, but I guess their choices serve the plot better. :)
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June 19, 2007 at 12:00 AM
I don't know why I didn't read this earlier. It's very well-written. Your spelling and grammar is flawless, for the most part (little things, don't worry too much), and your plot is very well laid-out, switching between calm areas and sudden bursts of action.
I wonder, though, why in the hell they didn't call the freakin' cops so that they made sure he was put away??? For Pete's sake, I know they want out, but Grey should have at least tied him up for the cops or something.
Keep up the great work! I'll be keeping an eye out on this one.
I wonder, though, why in the hell they didn't call the freakin' cops so that they made sure he was put away??? For Pete's sake, I know they want out, but Grey should have at least tied him up for the cops or something.
Keep up the great work! I'll be keeping an eye out on this one.
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June 19, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Very nice story! Keep it up.