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love the ending leaves the way for a possible second story after all the brother and johns story was never answered as to why they don't like eachother and the brother needs a girl too... lol. only a couple of suggestions and one change I would like to add. talk more about the fashion/dresses when penny goes shopping it will appeal to your female audiance, be careful as to where you have penny and james sound like pirates its a little far fetched that they would speak like that (yelling) outside of a party/ gathering where a guest might overhear and get them all put in jail. Describe the setting that they are in such as james's house what does it look like what type of neighborhood is it in do they have servants etc... the only correction I caught was when you were talking about pennys parents the Dutchess and Dutchman of lowell... should the Duke and Dutchess of Lowell. great sex scene at the end and I love the part where both james and thomas slap penny on the rear at the same time it showed that whether they like eachother or not they have more in common than they are willing to admit.
Rae

Hey! What a story! I found it just now and read all the chappies!I can't wait for the next chapter!

I like it so far.

OMG! Captain Penny!!!! And a very demanding and strict one as well... "you better fuck me tonight!" LOL
She is GOOD!!! Poor James... he won't know what hit him. I'm anxiously waiting for the next installment!

While I was reading your update, I was thinking that you've never mentioned the captain's name... it was a nice surprise to see that mentioned in the end of it! I like his name and I loved the fact that despite being a pirate captain, he showed Penny his feelings and apoloized as well... that is a lot for a man, I know... I can understand Penny's doubts and second thoughts about all this... I hope they work things out. :))

You kno that you DO have to continue with the kiss in the next chapter! I loved it that Penny got these horrible men back and that she found her sassy tongue back! It did work for her, didn't it? :)

Ooooh, bad captain... evil, naughty captain... poor Penny!
But I guess she got exactly what she deserved...
I'm glad to see you back! Take your time and write some more! :)

Oh, hi! Glad to see you back!
I liked the previous chapter, but I think I like this one better... It was nice to see that Penny is not a total bitch and she finally realized that she is really in no position of arguing with the captain... I so feel for the poor captain and I can't wait to see what happens next with her punishment...
Very good work!

Ok, longer new chapter! Woo! As I suspected, poor, poor captain... What exactly was Penny expecting when she boarded the ship? That she'll be welcomed with open arms when they found out about her? I think she does deserve to be punished... hard... by the captain... she really did behave like a bitch...

So, the captain has issues... I'm really curious to see how all this will play out. I hope Penny won't push him too hard or she might get the opposite reaction back.